Scattered Visions

I do not recognize these

Scattered visions you try

To distract me with

Pointing this way and that

Into normalcy

 

So desperate to convince

Yourself

More so then those

Around you that

You are not in pain

 

Sage scented hair

Bound up in rouge

And lavender

Have some wondering

What days you are reliving

 

I watch you from afar

Trying to understand

Why the liquids

Have such power to seduce you

While they threaten to drown

 

The only promise given is

Torn flesh of those who loved

Enough to swim out

Even when relationships

Were tipped upside down

 

I get glimpses of

The woman you were

Every now and then

And it makes me want to scream

Into your eyes and pull her out

 

 

Reviews

[Ms. Gruye]

And it makes me want to scream
Into your eyes and pull her out...


those are mighty powerful lines and end this piece perfectly. In fact, this speaks about how I have felt about every woman I have known, and I find that strange. Like we are all constructing this ideal "wonder woman" and secretly holding each other accountable for that. so in a way, this one speaks to the character but alos tells a lot about the narrator too. I know I often see strengths in my friends that I wish I had and then feel let down when they do not live up to my standard.

We b*****s be CRAZY!!!

[Bud]

I see this as a piece of inner reflections. Strangely, I can also picture an island afar off being battered by the ocean's waves, diminishing over time and losing the battle. Again, Outstanding.

[Phibby Venable]

this is very powerful. excellent ending and intensity.

[Ed Hart]

when you pull it from your heart and add the tempo of your muse, this vision becomes not just your voice addressing a private hair-scented 'sage', but the encounter we all have with those who are lost, and try to point the way for us...a powerful write