Complicating Jealousy

Complicating Jealousy

A Poem by Travie
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I wrote this when jealousy struck me as a way to let it out.

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Jealousy is a b***h, 
Like a storm inside your head, 
Dark clouds hover over, 
Never seeming to end.

It hardens your heart, 
And eats away at your soul, 
It walks down a path, 
Of pure hatred and destruction. 

It's like a burning fire, 
Spreading from end to end, 
Nothing can put it out, 
Until you're left with blackness and a hole.

So don't let the shame take you, 
For there is light on the other side, 
It will eventually come to a halt, 
And keep passing until the end of time.

© 2015 Travie


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Travie
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I agree.
"It's like a burning fire,
Spreading from end to end,
Nothing can put it out,
Until you're left with blackness and a hole."
Your words strong and true. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


I found myself relating to this write. Great job:) Thanks for sharing!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Love the poem, dear! And it's fully relatable. Jealousy is a wicked thing for sure.

Posted 9 Years Ago


What a strong first line!
Well done!
Keep it up!

Posted 9 Years Ago


A little bit of jealousy's a lot of fun. Too much though, disaster

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Yes, jealousy when out of control is something we should be afraid of, but some jealousy is good. it makes the relationship healthy.
you did a good job spilling your guts on paper. I like the flow of it, and the tone is most apt.

Posted 9 Years Ago


"It walks down a path" sticks out because all the other lines are dramatic burning hateful, but walks down a path is neutral.

Posted 9 Years Ago


I love the idea of this writ! Nicely done, Travie.

Posted 9 Years Ago


I like the idea of jealousy not being a phase, but a cycle that can occur not only from love. G8 m8 8/8

Posted 9 Years Ago



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