I Will Wait For You

I Will Wait For You

A Poem by Treo LeGigeo
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In sickness and in health, in good times and in bad, and in joy as well as in sorrow, I will wait for you.

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The letter came that fateful day,
To tear you and I apart.
The weeks before you were forced on your way,
Were a blur of a blackened art.

For months I agonised for your return to date,
In sorrow deep enough for fiction.
Until on the dreaded list I read of your fate:
"Missing In Action"

In years that passed, I waited alone,
While no news came of the part of myself.
Hordes of soldiers were flocking back home,
But your file just gathered dust on the shelf.

I knew not if you were dead or alive,
I knew not what to do.
I had closed my heart, praying you would survive,
To love again, seemed taboo.

Time flew by and my hope began to dwindle,
Though I still clutched at your small chance.
But soon all was left was a flickering candle,
Quivering in its uncertain dance.

What was I to think, I was torn,
Should I love again or retain my faith?
Surrender hope or stay lovelorn,
Or choose another to take your place?

My anguish one morn was put to an end, 
When finally, I learned,
That I had to let go, could not pretend,
For I was awaiting one who would never return.

The letter came that fateful day,
To tear you and I apart.
But 'Nam was not where the fighting truly lay,
The real war was within my heart.

© 2013 Treo LeGigeo


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This has the feeling of a ballad, and the repitition of the first stanza (more or less) I think puts this in that genre. It tells a story cleanly, without much obfuscation or elaborate rhetoric or dense diction. The rhymes were solid, I wasn't even bothered by "fiction"/"action" like I normally would be lol

I once read that "A tragedy is never based on a character having to choose between a virtue and a vice, but rather between two competing virtues, like love of family, or love of country" and I found the stanza debating between "faith" and "love", or even "reason" and "emotion" the most interesting part of this piece. The theme "all is fair in love and war" also popped to mind...anyhow, nice write.

The only suggestion I can offer is that you fit this into a proper ballad format, but that's up to you, naturally.

Posted 8 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.




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That was really really good so sad. For any person who lost someone to war but yet for those who have a war that still remains. Nice job.

Posted 8 Years Ago


this was so good and I love the feeling to it

Posted 8 Years Ago


I like the idea you had with this piece, a lost lover - never knowing if they are living or gone but accepting the worst because you're heart just can't handle waiting. Unfortunately i don't think that the rhyming scheme flows to well and it makes it awkward to read, but apart from that i don't see how this poem could be anything but beautiful. Excellent work!

Posted 8 Years Ago


4 of 5 people found this review constructive.

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A sensitive topic, done well, entity.
Poetry sure can stir the soul, this poem does just that...
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Posted 8 Years Ago


I love military pieces, and this one shall be added to the shelf of my favorites. (:

Posted 8 Years Ago


This reminds me. It's a brilliant write, with lots of emotion. Outstanding.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Sad, but it's very strong. And I could feel a lot of the emotion. I like it you did a nice job on it!

Posted 8 Years Ago


A very profound poem with excellent rhyme and meter my friend. It tells the story of what many have gone through.

Posted 9 Years Ago


From experience, I can tell you that even when you are "informed", as they say in officiakdom, that the one whose return you await will never come home; as long as the body has not been found, a small part of you still dreams.
Good peice, you made me remember.
There is a bit of roughness in the world, a little polishing will deal with that.

Posted 9 Years Ago



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Added on October 11, 2010
Last Updated on April 3, 2013
Tags: War, Loss, Love, Heartbreak, Sad, Tragedy, Conscription, Vietnam

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Treo LeGigeo
Treo LeGigeo

Sydney, NSW, Australia



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I'm from Australia, so some people may find that I spell things differently. I love writing and have had a couple of publications of short stories and novellas under a pseudonym. I started .. more..

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