The End is near

The End is near

A Poem by Tris
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A poem about the end of all.

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 The stars not shining,

The sky not blue,

Nobody is near you,

The day not coming,

The end is near,

Earth trembling with fear.

 

The humans praying 

For their life.

Waiting so they will know,

If anybody will save them now.

But the end is near,

Everybody`s waiting with fear.

 

The torches lighten,

Like stars on earth, 

Giving the humans hope.

Yet, this is no night,

The end is near.

You are fighting with the fear.

© 2009 Tris


Author's Note

Tris
Yeah, I wrote it down in 5 minutes so I don`t really expect it to be good. This is one of my version of the world ending in darkness. Hope you`ll like it.

Greets,
Tris

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great piece.... a flanshei, dont know how its spelt but, you've out done your self i personally think.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like it. Though, I do think you should maybe make it a bit longer, it sounds a bit unfinished. But overall I like it.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Well, I used "the fear" because it felt right to end it so. Also, I believe that fear is very hard to fight and it has a very big effect on what we do.
Thank you very much for the constructive review and I hope that you will like my other things too.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Chilling. *smile*
Also very sad. The hopelessness is felt in this piece.

I'm only curious as to why you ended the last stanza with "the fear" instead of just "fear" like the others.
Either way, it's a wonderful endeavor.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Tris
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