Wind

I sit here I my car as its getting blown around,
I turn up my radio to quieten the sound.
The trees look like their dancing, swaying to and throw
Look like a ballet, putting on a good show.
The rain is falling and hitting my window pane,
They join together and look like a chain.
Watching the droplets slide across,
Just when I think I'm going to win, Ive lost.

Reviews

[emmajoy]

' The trees look like their dancing, swaying to and throw - Look like a ballet, putting on a good show.'

Such visual lines.. can see what you're saying, have said.

Welcome yet another Brit.. though seems you've been writing for ages. Everyone needs try and try again with writing, whether poetry or prose. I've been in the cafe for near ten years and still wearing L. Plates¬!
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The guys below have left fine advice.. and if you need more help.. there are lots of online sites you can learn from, if you want. I have but it doesnt show that often!! Meantime, there's nothing better than writing with your heart as well as the keys you press... never lose your own voice.. Take care, keep safe. Keep writing as you do too.

[Relic]

I agree with Gee. Also, second line should be quiet not quieten. Last line sounds forced.
But do not fret. You can write, you just need to make sure you revise. That's the most important part of writing. Keep at it.

[Gee]

3rd line their should be they're and throw should be fro.
Might be a good idea to syllable count each line if you are just starting out Johnny, it will give a more even flow to your poems.
Also not a bad idea to read aloud your work as that will be how it "sounds" to the reader.
Cheers

[Johnny42]

Only just started writing . Thank you for helping me.. I have a way to go before I'm as good as you and the others on here. Will listen to your advice my friend. Thank you