SubmisS[ive]SymBiossiS (pARTt two- bb)

Chewing Lemon Skins with Dirt
Dripping Down Pouring [A.riP.iNher.shirt]
Contemp[t]lating this empTea
OpeNiNg where Life.and.Living
Made their first
Jump through...their first attempt at SuiSiDE
Off the tip top of the empire state building
Where A BigGwwhAaaLEe and a little tuna KaNn
With a hole in thy middle
Of the DanceFloOr Sit
That Jump PAst RunningFassstPast THE PAST
And The PAst
And The other Past
That's not so much a past atall
But a Fragmented Photograph
Freefalling waiting
Opening but not utilizing
The willing Paiiiiiiira[shoes]shoot
That just so happen
To be Abund[dumb]taly
Sprouting little sprouts of
MaNmade SirVIVal
Right there in her little Womb
That should be working as a Little tomb
For incestrial b******s like the BlueMunKey
Who crawls into And sings his song
To All who are WiLLing to listen
To HiS sing songy tales of
CarpalsMetTaCarRpalsTarsals[and]Phalanges
PraiSiNG all that he know[Knows?]KNOWS
iS holy [thatbook.thatbook.thatFUCKINGbook]
Allowing him to easily sit up straight
In the small container of survival
With Sharp edges and StrAiGHT LiNes
And Smiles..just smiles
As he GaInsAn upperEntryhand
A larger probability margin
To get to where he needs to be

iS the She lacking..?
Still Asking but knowing and seeing the answer.

 

 

Reviews

[Lyra Day]

That Jump PAst RunningFassstPast THE PAST
And The PAst
And The other Past
That's not so much a past atall

This poem is so very sad. You have hidden it with play on words.. or WITH words.. but that play has made it ever more clear. I thoroughly enjoyed this poem... especially the obove pasted lines. Bravo.

[Raef C. Boylan]

"Sprouting little sprouts of
MaNmade SirVIVal" - i like; it's fun and potentially serious at the same time.

I tend to take your capitalisation as indications of where to place emphasis on certain sounds or phrases, but the above is either just poetic distraction, or i'm not getting it.
"VIV" so that a segmented "Sir" follows "MaN"?

"PraiSiNG all that he know[Knows?]KNOWS
iS holy [thatbook.thatbook.thatFUCKINGbook]" - i like how, again, it's reminiscent of the Mind's out-of-control word association games. Praise...holy...bible..."thatFUCKINGbook". Yeah.

Your work is more refreshing tha a shoeheel up the a*s.

Haha.

I always wondered when i'd go crazy again and what would drive me to it...

...you.

Lol.

Thanks again for sharing this.

[Raef C. Boylan]

Wow.
You're gonna be the undisputed master of wordplay.

The first line is a great opener...i mean, you could be taking us anywhere with that.

I greet
reappearances
the BlueMunKey and
A BigGwwhAaaLEe and a little tuna KaNn
like old friends
maybe ones who had a drunken orgy
at a misguided party
one midsummer's night
and now only feel human
when together
because who the hell else would
underst(hANDjob)?

Lol.
See that? Your writing gives me the freedom to do that.
Thank you for it all.

Like i was saying, glad to see those guys featuring again.
Maybe they're the whole point, but since i'm not the poet
"How the f**k was i supposed to know?"

Am i allowed to suggest
an apostrophe
in
"Thats not so much a past atall" (That's)?
Thank you and good(night)morning(show).