Altm

..iM more than the
extra.tear.rest.trial
melting.pot -
smelling like old
sea.men -
propped up
against this rugged
doorway
waiting for you to
unwrap the goodies
at my feet

my fingers just
press the butt.ons
it's the fast air
that makes the music
a worthy musical
with its
musical
wrongness
which makes
it
right because
upside
down bananas
would
be the right side
up
of wrong
if my iEyes didnt
force everything to be seen
180 degrees
from its true
position
that's onli
true
if one believes
in equality
and not dictated
decrees
which decrease
the free motion
of particles
and kinetic energy
and that's like anti-physics
restraining the physique

iM more like
a
technicality
of
emotional abnormality
cause
i got aaa head full
of nonsense
two decades
minus three years of
brainwashing
and a
fish who likes
to play with sharks
in salty water
at high tide

iEye ride bulls
as my main source of
transportation
with the ticketing ticketors
tracing my trail
to see a trick
unfold bbetweeenn my lips
fingertips
stroking the cash nestled
between the clip
as i let it slip
to my lighter
as the laughter
of another
round of the no touchin
game rings in my
ears

what a wonderful day
mum
yeahh
what a wonder.full day
is what i would say
if i could say
what ive wanted to say
since the first lay..

 

 

Author's Note

damn that stings

im a little meany

Reviews

[Raef C. Boylan]

haha
at your description
first off
yo

"extra.tear.rest.trial"
yeahhhhh
four score

i'm praising it
to the uncaring skies
yet
to deny that i
don't fully comprehend it
would be a lie

it's been a while since i did this review s**t
about 6 days
damn
lost


"my fingers just
press the butt.ons
it's the fast air
that makes the music
a worthy musical
with its
musical
wrongness"

not gonna wanna
hear this
but reminds me
of...
...ahem...
lady farts
the kind that don't come out of the butt(on)
but near the button
and friction causes build up of air
and it gets noisy
as small particles escape

i may be wrong
as in Wrong
like wrongness
like Wrong Person

"that's onli"
must be a reason for this misspeliing
what what what
does it mean?

"if one believes
in equality
and not dictated
decrees
which decrease
the free motion
of particles
and kinetic energy
and that's like anti-physics
restraining the physique" - rhyming skill here

i'll be back
the computer is telling me i have 5 minutes left

[place with the books]

[eli mercuree rue]

oh i need more of those we need more of those hahahahahaha
damn thats bad to kill batteries in such a ....way lol

[eli mercuree rue]

onli = only i
hahaha
sorry forgot that one

[lostintheworld]

aaa

like triple a batteries
haha

f****r
f**k her

[eli mercuree rue]

haha well since i dont know
what this
piece is fully about mahself
ill review it too
cause this f****r [me] put everything between the periods
_______________________________________________________________


oh well ok somethings i do know....

addressed from daughter to mum
clearly
wanting to tell her how she feels about
certain things
considering the last stanza
but she cant because shes scared or doesnt
want to face it
which i suppose is like scared

anyway

line by line ....hmm
maybe

..iM more than the
extra.tear.rest.trial
melting.pot - ..........ahhh start here. well so someone [me] has been categorized labeled etc as this brain of awesomness are the melting pot shes a forged cookie melted with others ideas but is trying to come out full mouthed and say lookie im not that im this person ...
smelling like old
sea.men - ...well uh seamen.semen hmm yeah well theres still a little weirdness there like that act got me 2 be me completily and i say thats givin him to much credit
propped up
against this rugged
doorway
waiting for you to
unwrap the goodies
at my feet ....i take it as a metaphor of the instability of this family me being the treat the one whos gonna help everyone out whos suppose too make it and i sure as hell dont want anyone waiting on me cause thas just anxiety times infinity

my fingers just
press the butt.ons ...of an instrument boylan an instrument although that was funnt haha
my hands are its b***h
it's the fast air
that makes the music ....but my breath is what makes it work like that s**t thats mandatory for survival argh f****n body
a worthy musical
with its
musical
wrongness ...yeah im not perfect... but who or what is perfection is the biggest flaw eh
which makes
it
right because ...imperfectly perfect tis ok to be different broken wrong whatever
upside
down bananas
would
be the right side
up
of wrong
if my iEyes didnt
force everything to be seen
180 degrees ...well they do we live in an upside down world haha
umm s**t gets rearranged and wicked things i never seen before start adorin me.. hmm i should probably post that poem on here maybe someday
from its true
position
that's onli
true
if one believes
in equality
and not dictated
decrees
which decrease
the free motion
of particles
and kinetic energy
and that's like anti-physics
restraining the physique ....damn i like that part it f***s my tongue just right hmm so lauren or le whatever umm so you can onli be free once you break the chains of whats thereeeeeeeeeee f*****g you in the a*s holding you back conformity and brick walls pink floyd we dont need no education
just another brick in the wall
teachers leave them kids alone type deal
fantastically
rotating
in my hmm
rotating thing with heat and stuff

iM more like
a
technicality
of
emotional abnormality ...ahh nice straight forward eh?
cause
i got aaa head full ...three a's interesting haha they laugh
of nonsense
two decades
minus three years of ..hmm a time frame age? uh yeah silly
brainwashing ...f****n tv and old people will do it to ya
and a
fish who likes
to play with sharks
in salty water
at high tide ...hmm a something living on the edge testin life
or something maybe i dont get it yet

iEye ride bulls
as my main source of
transportation
with the ticketing ticketors
tracing my trail
to see a trick
unfold bbetweeenn my lips
fingertips
stroking the cash nestled
between the clip ...ok i had a prostitution moment while writing .. but yeah i feel like this watching my little sister chased by guys wanting a prize
as i let it slip
to my lighter ...yeah its a crime but burning money keeps you warm in the cold
as the laughter
of another
round of the no touchin
game rings in my
ears ...fun game kiss without touchin see who can last the longest try it boylan tis fun

what a wonderful day
mum
yeahh
what a wonder.full day ..day of learning experiences
is what i would say
if i could say
what ive wanted to say
since the first lay.. ...something holding me back from my past from being open and honest with me mum lost of trust hope faith whatever
will be restored one day maybe

haha
hmm im done
finally
took
an hour
damn i suck

[Engulfed in Flames]

That was the s**t yo!!! That was ill on the real.....keep it up yo...

[Amanda Crandall]

Im still enthralled by your writing style, I enjoyed the poem very much, time to sit back let it sink rinse repeat.

[W Alt. Burns]

everything is whacked here as it should be.

loving it. the play is hot.

[lostintheworld]

f**k me silly
oh yeah you did
um
yeah

haha
no touching game
haha

damn LE
you gonna have to break it down yo
i'm like lost in you
and can't see it all...

help a grl out
i'm a lil intoxicated....