Dolotin

Dolotin

A Poem by eli mercuree rue

Tr- tr- tr- tripping.

Your froggy best miss

Keep it jumping

Pushing

 

Rushing in

 

Ice cold

Rush rush rush

Warmth

 

Now float on.

 

freedom.


these thoughts

in 

this sleepyhead.


not anyone's at all.


sir.

excuse me.

sir.


ma'am.


knock knock on the stream of the weightless hand.


the brief injection

leaves us erection-less

but

feeds it all

and we can't be restless.

© 2010 eli mercuree rue


Author's Note

eli mercuree rue
Just some memories.

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"knock knock on the stream of the weightless hand" - yo, trippity line :-D

technically - "not anyones at all" - [anyone's] - but maybe not because who has time for apostrophes up onna shroom cloud [eek world go boom]

haha
well i read it at least

I liked this bit too:

"sir.
excuse me.
sir.


ma'am." - but then I would 'cos I'm a confused fuckerrr

yup

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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"Your froggy best miss"
Reminds me of playing a role, trying to be what everyone else wants, a clone. While you can't be the 'best' clone. And the drugs they give you to be perfect only mask your individuality.

Posted 12 Years Ago


"knock knock on the stream of the weightless hand" - yo, trippity line :-D

technically - "not anyones at all" - [anyone's] - but maybe not because who has time for apostrophes up onna shroom cloud [eek world go boom]

haha
well i read it at least

I liked this bit too:

"sir.
excuse me.
sir.


ma'am." - but then I would 'cos I'm a confused fuckerrr

yup

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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eli mercuree rue
eli mercuree rue

Durham, NC



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