Sweetly Broken

So-called "friend".

The steps I'm taking on a bloody path,
Risks apt to crumble the ground I walk on
An axe to split every single visible lath,
Uneasy to whether I'll live until dawn.

Every way I inch, unsure what'll come,
You'll break me surely if I'm caught
The pain that's turning my heart so numb,
Appears with the sweetness that I sought.

You hold back anger with a small cold smile,
And turn to the large wandering crowd
My heart torn out for you to reconcile,
You declare my blunder, tall and loud.

I'm left for the wolves, bloody and ripped apart,
My mistakes revealed openly to the world
A lesson I learn for handing you my heart
My puppet strings around your finger, twirled.

I stand lonesome again without my pride,
The person I loved shot a knife through my throat
The human I was has been thoroughly tried,
"The deed has been done," the letter now wrote.
 

Author's Note

I don't like the last line... Don't comment on it.

Reviews

[charlotte talley]

nicely done, good write, I like it just as it is. it flowed great.

[DeathByChoice]

I don't really think there's anything wrong with the last line, I think it kind of ties it all together:)
Nice job!

[The Chocoholic]

Love the flow. Darkly beautiful!

[Emilia Kuemin]

I very much like this poem. Im unsure why, but just something in my mind enjoys the imagery it creates.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was very good. I really enjoyed this. I liked the way I could imagine what was going on. Thanks for sharing. :)

[HappyTaylor]

I like this alot!

[Kia-chan!]

Very good :)

[R E Tree]

Such emotion in this, such regret and tearful honest words written to create a beautiful poem. Also a lesson to learn and I hope people do learn from the mistakes. Don't get tricked and be fool of lending someone your heart for them to crush it. This poem has like a dark and deadly tone it. The damage done in this poem is so powerful.

[Coyote Poetry]

Such strength and power in every line. I like the feel and anger in the story. A well written poem. I had to read a few time. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Darruesh Eetraydes]

Wow I felt such emotion. You swept me away with it. That was amazing