I would have loved For you to be here Right now With me As I am lost between Fragments of moments And as my thoughts get tangled Everytime I try to put them into Wor(l)ds Come and go Leaving me awake In-betweens
As you might notice in the future, the tittle of my writings is made up of random letters and numbers. I actually don't like giving a name to what I write. It feels like that would limit and give a shape to my writings, and I like whatever that comes out of me to remain shapeless and timeless. I also like to think of what I write as "moments" or "thoughts" rather than poetry. I hope you will enjoy them and any review/feedback is much appreciated.
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Very unique naming system. Great poem as well. Interesting structure and lots of feeling. You really get the sense of being fragmented by reading this. Very relate-able. I think everyone has felt this way at least once in their lives.
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
I am glad my poem gave you that sensation and that you could relate to it. :)
I like the fact you didn't give this a proper title, it makes the piece a little more unique and interesting. It definitely caught my attention. as for the actual piece you have here I am definitely a fan of the simplicity you have befriended in these lines. The emotion stands out and is powerful, you set the tone well and with such easy. awesome write.
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Thank you for your kind words, I really appreciate your review!
Short but effective. I really like how you've played around with the words and allowed yourself to be free and expressive with your writing. It works so well!
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
I am really glad this was to your liking, thank you!
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