Rusty Rip Tide

I can try to write out

All of these feelings inside,

But I end up stuck

When I get to my pride. 

It's not right, but

I'll survive. 

Vulnerability waving like 

The flag that my enemy

Is trying to capture.

I won't let them take it.

For once I'll stand as tall 

As I can be and smile. 

Being without you is no

Easy task, but seeing as

You were never mine, 

It's just depressing rather

Than heartbreaking or 

Life altering. 

I just miss talking to you,

As a friend, as anything you'd like

So much as you were in my life. 

That's too much to ask now and you, 

You've moved on. 

I'm doing the best I can 

To follow suit

And move on like a current, but

I'll be damned if you aren't 

The rip tide

That will pull me under. 

Reviews

[BabyBluee]

woww I have to say I loove ur writing cuz Im going thru the same exact thing rightnow and its nice to know Im not alone : ) I loove the way you express your emotions in this poem, while also painting a picture with the beautiful imagery. I loove the last two lines "the rip tide that will pull me under" those are such strong words...beautiful write : )

[K.C. Zbryk]

The torrent of emotion flowing through this makes it feel as if the reader is on some sort of river ride and the dead stall at the end make sit feel as there was a sudden unexpected drop. Brilliantly captured and the flow holds the reader captive. Great write

[Kenneth The Poet]

Stellar work, a mature piece of longing, penned in a way that makes me think this is not typical teenage angst. I love the last stanza the most. It likes the rug from Lebowski's living room.

[Pratik]

A very well penned down poem..the dilemma of letting bygones be bygones and move forward in life... we all go through that phase.. but sometimes when there are still things to pull us back it becomes too difficult..the idea has been very well portrayed.. Keep up the good work Lambi.. :)

[MS. BABy]

thisis classic inner turmoil Lambi, I enjoyed the way you told this very human...oh how we are wonderfully human...smile.