Jerk of Hearts

I am the thief of every one of your smiles

Collecting your voice in a magical vial

I have to steal it!

Before you'd reveal it

I'd up and melt into a chocolatey pile.

I am a creature of velvet and style

A psychotic villain that's silken and wild

I am uncaring

I'd leave you despairing

Staring, and glaring

and bearing a child

I am quite fond of being stuck here, inside.

I find I don't mind if I have to reside

Alone with my thoughts, without all of your naughts

And your cants and I wonts and it donts and the like.

I saw a red robin with blood on her side

The blood was the shade of the robin's own pride

I followed her sadly, and wanted her badly

To heal and to love and to make her my bride.

I can has eyes that go loopy and wide?

A small glass of soda with hair to her thighs.

And though I'm here, only...

I'll never be lonely

If you bring me a thing I can drink and imbibe.

Reviews

[redzone]

well there is nothing like poetry dipped in "madness chocolate", what can I say it's CHOCOLATE(y).... first off I like these "scattered" thoughts they come together nicely... and I also like the scattered way they are formatted, though it is the content mostly, whimsical with just the right amount of love's insight.... it reminds me of another poet who would use this style of writing (haven't seen her around lately)... so all in all I would say this poem is worthy of at least 3lbs of melted chocolate to dip your pen in....

and I need to blame Jacob and Ana for pointing me to your poetry DCM, now I must go and by me some chocolate truffles with butterscotch filling....

[Dripping Chocolate Madness]

Lol thanks for popping by!
Ecstatic that I could spread the madness further.
Chocolate is contagious. Little known fact.

[redzone]

AND one of the basic food groups, and cures almost everything... think how nice the world would be if everyone loved chocolate!!!!

[Dripping Chocolate Madness]

Wait... You know someone that doesn't?
Damn. We must have missed them in the lecithin purge of '09.
Ok... PM me their name. I'll get my old tempering gun back out.

[Nicole]

I love your writings....they keep me on my toes...I start reading and I think I’m going along smoothly and all of a sudden I trip over lines you’ve created that I didn’t expect to be there. I love reading pieces that are unpredictable. This one is one of my favorites on the site so far....the imagery is shocking and I love it! have an amazing week and thank you for sharing

[Dripping Chocolate Madness]

Thx so much!
That's incredibly generous of you.
I'm just fooling around, over here.read moreThx so much!
That's incredibly generous of you.
I'm just fooling around, over here.
:)
You as well!

[Lia Columbus]

It was a fun read. Great rhyming schemes and swift changes. It is all wanting what you want at a time...
Plus I see you are a got fan . I already like you
Lia

[Dripping Chocolate Madness]

everyone likes chocolate.
except nazis and sharks.
You can hardly be blamed, its only natural :)

Thx! I've been having a ball with silly rhyming schemes lately.

[Lia Columbus]

Welcome... I was referring to your comment about John snow though :)

[Dripping Chocolate Madness]

lol yes i know
But its Jon. I dont think they could afford an H for him.

[Lia Columbus]

Freaking Autocorrect... Hell yeah

[jacob erin-cilberto]

going mad in chocolate limericks makes me want to jump off the bridge into a puddle of Mounds...
I do love coconut and your slant rhyme in this...
so very creative these are.
j.

[Dripping Chocolate Madness]

:) thx
i've been having fun with rhyming lately.

[Chris Shaw]

Love the limerick feel of these little stanzas which move very jerkily in layout, switching to different thoughts Three I ams and an I can. Enjoyed the rhyme.

Chris.

[Dripping Chocolate Madness]

Thanks!
They were fun to write.
I've been enjoying rhyming silliness lately.

[Gee]

The sites gone rhyming mad.
Do so like this even though I pretty clueless as to what it who the "I" is.
Love rhyming when done well and this is.
Good morning

[Dripping Chocolate Madness]

Good Morning! Thanks! yeah, theres a few of us have gone down that road it seems. :)
I is. It is I.

[Reinrose]

This is wonderful. I see cats. There is thirst and hunger, and the offering of oneself. The wish to torturously seduce. It is wonderful. The spacing makes it jerk.

[Dripping Chocolate Madness]

:)
All those things.
And others, far more explicit.

[Reinrose]

Explicit is too easy

[Dripping Chocolate Madness]

hence the limmericky insanity :)
A fine substitute, don't you think?

[Reinrose]

I know I is

[Dripping Chocolate Madness]

You know nothing, Jon Snow.

[Ana Papaya]

Wow! Blown away! I'm trying to think of something more to say.
This is nuts! In a good way.

[Dripping Chocolate Madness]

I'm honestly pretty floored that we both posted our own versions of rhyming insanity within minutes of each other lol
Must be one of those nights. I mean years.
...Lives.

[Ana Papaya]

Yeah. :) but I like yours better

[Dripping Chocolate Madness]

Ooooh you little...
*shakes fist*

[Ana Papaya]

Lol! : )