Is it a She?

Very few walk this path of old,

Sheltered and preserved like the Colassal of Rhodes.

Hiding and sticking to the main street,

No courage to try new earth beneath their feet.

Men is a race of followers,

No leaders in the running.

Hiding behind words already spoken,

Afraid of the others' shunning.

But soon with all this war and fighting,

Mankind will need someone to take charge,

A chosen one, a man with cunning,

To convince this world to call him "Sarge".

When will he come? When will we see?

Where is this man...or is it a she?

Reviews

[Raymond Federle]

Haunting and dark....EXCELLENT! :)

[Reese P. Holmes]

I can't find a single nitpick about the poem. I like the wording, the message and the grammar. It's a really interesting poem I could find myself repeating to myself at times, just because it seems fun to do so. The one thing I wonder about is the title. The title works and people would remember it, but it gives away the twist ending, if that's what it's supposed to have. This is an inconsequential nitpick, as overall I find the quality of this work to be phenomenal.

[Nusquam Esse]

Quite a clever ending, a very abrupt twist that few people would write. My favorite line though was the bit about the Colossus of Rhodes. The whole bit about sheltered and preserved takes an interesting twist considering that the monument was actually destroyed roughly 50 years after it was built.

[Vampaslick]

NIiceeee I didn't think anyone would catch that one. I did a project on the Colossus of Rhodes a while back. Thanks for the review:)

[Nusquam Esse]

Another fun little twist, that I don't know if it was intended or not, is that the statue of liberty (the lady) is based upon the Colossus of Rhodes.