A Poem by Vanna Renee

A familiar tale we can all come to.

Once I smiled at you,
Hunting out that smile,
Refusing your refusal to be happy.
Smiles came in piles.

Once I hugged you,
While you were in an ocean of tears.
I set aside every little thing,
To help you face your fears.

Once I loved you,
As a sister; a friend.
We had one each other's backs,
To hold, and defend.

Once I couldn't be there for you,
Frowns then came in piles,
Fears became reality,
Defense was pressured, shrouding behind
 The hatred we gave one another.

Once I saw you in the hallway,
Looking like a skank,
Padded bras and tight jeans,
Lying that there was money in the bank.

Once I cried for you
I couldn't stop.
You weren't the same.
I ticked your clock.

Once I walked past you.
With an Alpha B***h expression,
Adrenaline filling my ego,
Though my heart scared with Depression.

Once our eyes met.
I was the first to look away.
Funny how things change,
First it was you,
And now I'm more astray.

Once I said I was sorry,
I knew you didn't believe me.
Liar liar pants on fire.
Crushed to embers, blood to deep mahogany.

Once you sat beside me.
I fiddled with my phone,
Read with monotone
The messages you sent me,
Stating you hated me.
Stating you're happy excluding my presence.
Me stating,
Once was now a full moon, is now just a crescent.

Once upon a divine friendship,
Stood a wall.
The only way to get across the wall was to climb.
All would fall.

© 2010 Vanna Renee

Author's Note

Vanna Renee
This one goes to Emily Leanne, she wrote something similar.

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So strong and powerful are the emotions in this piece. Really great read.

Posted 11 Years Ago

I thought it was good.

Posted 12 Years Ago

Very impressive poem on a very troubling and painful subject, the betrayal of someone you trusted.

Posted 12 Years Ago

You have succeeding in turning something completely generic and over-done into a poem that is Unique! When I first started reading this I rolled my eyes and thought "Oh it's one of those types... Well here we go again." But lo and behold it fell together perfectly and I must commend you for the exquisite rhyming technique you used. Good job! :)

Posted 12 Years Ago

I like how natural the rhyming scheme seems!

Posted 12 Years Ago

filled with lots of emotion. really added efeect to the piece. well done :)

Posted 12 Years Ago

Very painful, a friendship ending.

Posted 12 Years Ago

quit catchy but very good indeed

Posted 12 Years Ago

Expressed wonderfully- some of the word choices bothered me, but otherwise this was very nicely done.


Posted 12 Years Ago

you had captured the mood well.
The horrible thing that could ever happen in friendship is friend's betrayal.

Posted 12 Years Ago

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