Adore

I climbed your wings...

and you shook me off

They scratched my arm--

I tasted gold.

(It's not so bitter)

The more I sink

the more you move.

Renew...I'm through...

I climbed your wings--

and we die aloft.

(...I'll keep you warm)

And the more we scream

the more I renew.

Still we'll soak,

a new codeine I hear.

I'm through...with all that seems--

haven and chrome.

A wing snaps to cry for me.

She won't sing,

though she'll soothe

and blow me away...

I'm through...renew...

(It's almost over)

Reviews

[Jamestown]

Wonderful write, I enjoyed the wording and message.

[beautiful dreamer]

again the intrapersonal dialogue is something i've never encountered before and i have to say im not hating it. but i really must sleep. from what ive read i have enjoyed your work. hope you get to might and enjoy it as well.

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

i hope you fell free from this very relatable right now and an incredible flow keep up the good work :)

[:o]

Wonderfully done and soothing in itself.

[Frontier]

This has a sort of interesting, metaphysical tone to it...I like that you used the word renew, I don't see it very often.

"And the more we scream
the more I renew." - this part's great!

[S C]

I'm through... with all that seems-- haven and chrome.

I misread at first as Heaven and Chrome.

I much prefer what you meant with Haven, the safety of it all even when everything is falling apart.

Just a beautiful line. xo

[Vile]

Thank you. Thank you. :D Glad you enjoyd it.

[Traci]

A very bittersweet write, absolutely beautiful, my friend.

[Vile]

Oh...there you are...lol

[Traci]

I knew that was coming!

[Dye]

Your words can be so cryptic sometimes that I find it challenging to understand, not that it's a bad thing...I just never know what to say in comments, so I read and leave... LOL. I feel like this was an easier one for me to understand or at least I think I understand it. Hahaha

[MoriartyMesa]

nice take on Icarus, loved the theme and truth. As I did when of the tales of Daedalus.

[Pryde Foltz]

Soaring one moment and falling to earth the next. Loved this write, Vile.

[Vile]

Thank you for the kind words. :D