The Abyss

Teal waves break against the sand

White froth turns to gold

Bringing treasures of a foreign land

And places never told

Surrender to its pull and find

Its deceptive peace is left behind

The teal becomes abysmal blue

And gold becomes an inky black

The wild shows its true face

Or shows none at all

Upon seeing this grandeur

The other world seems so small

Reviews

[Corwin T.]

Love the description here. I can even taste the sea while I read this magnificent poem. The "And gold becomes an inky black." is well used here because it disrupts the flow of the poem. At first, to some readers, this may bring on a distraction. But for me, it halts the flow, and really makes you think of the sea and the imagery becoming visualized in the readers mind. Thank you for posting!! Great job.

[Troy Henson]

So beautifully written. A great expressive piece that offers a differed level of imagery.
Can I be so keen to ask.....does this reflect a moment of personal feeling?
Great piece:)

[Nix]

I would say all my poems reflect personal feeling somewhat, this one included. Thank you for your review!

[Jo Todd]

A beautifully expressive poem with wonderfully stark imagery

[Ezekiel Silver]

A remarkable piece of literature with grand imagery.

[Anna a. S.M.]

Imaginary and very well written! :)

[Morgan Storms]

One of my favorite places to write! I really love the way you took this poem from light to dark. I believe that the ocean is all emotions in one, its like life; the tides can be blissfully ebbing and clear or they can be stormy and black and sad. I think you did a fantastic job with your descriptions. Thanks for sharing.

[Morgan Storms]

I forgot to say I love the word, abysmal.

[Rahul]

Interesting, imaginary, beautiful and well penned write. Thanks for sharing with me.
i liked your idea and theme on it. Every word's perfect in each line.
keep posting :)

[Bethany]

I really like the imagery in this, I could clearly imagine you sitting on the beach, taking in the beautiful surroundings.
I find it very interesting how you turned the poem around in the middle and talked about the "deceptive peace". Beauty never seems to last long, not in this world.
Although I'm not sure what you mean by "the other world"?
Thanks for sharing, great poem :)

[DeletedAccount156]

Beautiful pace and interesting scheme!!!

[LouisianaBird]

I love the pace and imagery of this poem
Well done (:

[Rogue]

This is a very visual piece. Though it has been awhile since I have been to the beach, for a moment while reading, I was there.

Thank you for sharing this one. :)