Empty Bottle

A poem I wrote as I reflected on a time when I thought everything was perfect, only to find out the opposite.

Empty Bottle

There she is…

I found her in a bottle

The sound of the ocean

Covered in my dottle

And the wind’s picking up

To blow her away

Ashes will scatter and be lost

I’m afraid…

Cold breezes of winter air

Blow across your long hair

It Smiles like a sunset

And I am like the glare

At the bottom of this bottle,

Blinded not to see

Eyes forever closed

I chase a tired dream

With every breath I breathe

And every night that wakes

I reassure your love

Assuming blinded faith

Digging and clawing

The sand at your feet

But the hole I am digging

Is a grave I’ve made for me

As I reflect upon a time

When my love was known simply

As my present reflection

Like this bottle...

It’s empty

Author's Note

A poem I wrote as I reflected on a time when I thought everything was perfect, only to find out the opposite.
Oh, and Dottle is the wet and sour-smelling mass of unburned tobacco found at the bottom of a tobacco pipe....for anyone who questions.

Reviews

[.Bunnie.]

...I'm not quite sure I get what this poem is saying? Maybe it's really simple and I am--yet again--not being the brightest crayon in the box...but I've read it three times now and I don't get it? I'm having trouble really picturing the scene in my head. But for the record, the poem flows really well. It's easy to read. :)

[Ellen Hammond]

Your metaphors are amazing! Thank you for sharing this.

[Niko Azazel]

this is a beautiful poem, very well written, the emotions in it are strong, i love it ^_^

[ICE]

This was amazing! There is tons of emotion here.

"It Smiles like a sunset

And I am like the glare"

"But the hole I am digging

Is a grave I've made for me

As I reflect upon a time

When my love was known simply

As my present reflection

Like this bottle...

It's empty"

You've made a great piece of work my friend.
~Ice

[Bud]

This is heartfelt, my friend! A wonderful and well written work of art! Keep up the great writes!

[Anjel]

very beautiful piece. the emotions are well stated and the visualization is wonderful. i enjoyed reading this one. i can relate to the feelings it contains.

[deeps]

This is so wonderful and ever so beautiful. I enjoyed this.

[Fran Marie]

I chase a tired dream

With every breath I breathe

And every night that wakes

I reassure your love


A most beauiully penned piece of poetry deeply expressed in poetic verse
love the line ~I chase a tired dream~ I'm sure many can relate to this/chasing pipe dreams
and the ashes being blown away in the wind ~Superb Pen my friend THanks for sharing
this in the Heartbreak Hotel contest

Fran Marie

[Jwana Creer Yeshua]

I love this...You put you in it and your feeling are over flowing in this poem. In our life we think things are perfect. But in reality nothing is ever perfect. But we have someone to fall back on when things do get out of hand. We have your Lord/Savior. I don't know if you believe but if you do know that He is always there. We as humans may not be able to see Him in human from but that is were faith comes in. To recieve His grace we have to believe. This was a great write. I enjoyed reviewing this poem. I will be looking for more poems from you in the near future.

Humbly,
Jwana Creer Yeshua

[Gandré]

This is a wonderful poem. Please enter one of my contests.
I loved the dream-like feeling I have when reading it. the same dream
had the writer, what I have seen seen at its end.. great poetry.