The Frozen Rose

The Frozen Rose

A Poem by there is no more from me on this account :( sorry
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Just something I Wrote

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The Frozen Rose

 

That Frozen Rose

That is down near the old lake

Which is now frozen

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This Frozen Lake

Freezes everything near it

So that rose lies their dripping

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That Frozen Rose

Lies their

The ice never melts

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The river doesn’t melt

Nothing around it melts

Their is nothing that will make this melt

Rose or River Melt

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I love it. I am not sure if you were talking about love or if you got your inspiration from a rose, but it is well written and leaves you hanging on for me until the last line.. Wonderful! :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


Amzing Poem
I like the last Bit the best:
"The river doesn’t melt
Nothing around it melts
Their is nothing that will make this melt
Rose or River Melt"
Exsalent :-)


Posted 14 Years Ago


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maybe I am wrong... Love? The Rose? Nothing can get through, because the ice won't melt? I'm sure you have your own meaning, as we all do, but what I take from it is...pain and desire. Beautiful, Ms.

Posted 14 Years Ago


okay but "Their" is "there"...
sounds like where I live; everything is frozen.
I'm thinking in Australia maybe 'there' is 'their' lol I don't know :)


Posted 14 Years Ago


Cool poem. Excellent imagery.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Wow. :D

Posted 14 Years Ago


Very good. For someone who live in Victoria to write of a frozen rose is quite something. The image is a striking one. Questions are raised: has the rose reached full flowering? Will the rose ever become any fuller/ more beautiful? Was the freezing sudden or did it creep up over time? Did the rose give up?
When the very thing that allows the rose to keep a semblance of its beauty: i.e. the freezing, thaws, the rose will rot, or melt as you say. Yet the rose has already conveyed something to someone that ensures it shall never melt. What?
Well done.


Posted 14 Years Ago


Hauntingly good! The repetition of the word "melt" moves the reader smoothly along.

Posted 14 Years Ago


I felt frozen by the lake, your imagery was very clear well done

Posted 14 Years Ago



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there is no more from me on this account :( sorry
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