Ok

My friend, sweet friend,
I know you're feeling hurt.
But it's time to cut the bullshit;
I don't mean to sound so curt.

I know the pain you're in,
I've felt it once or twice.
But don't let the pain get to you,
don't fall victim to its vice.

Don't cry, sweet friend, don't cry,
I know just how you feel.
You can't just wallow in sadness like this,
and all the while your character it steals.

I know you're gonna be alright;
that's really all i can say.
This pain won't plague you forever,
just hang on, ok?

Reviews

[Emmy]

I wish someone could have scream that in my face a few months ago:p I had my heart broken, and now I realize how stupid I was. It's a part of life;)

[Will]

We live and learn, don't we? Thanks for reading :)

[Rita L. Sev]

A wise and well-worded poem, Will.

You can't just wallow in sadness like this,
and all the while your character it steals.

Great advice - I would get rid of a few syllables for flow, though:

You can't just wallow in sadness,
while your character it steals.

[Will]

Thank you, Rita. As much as I agree with you that your suggestion flows much better, due to some sentimental reasons, I'm going to leave it as is. I appreciate your advice, though.

[Andie]

Such a beautiful and strength filled poem. I always love something packed tight with emotion like this.

[Will]

Thank you, Amanda. Im glad you appreciated it.

[Careline]

OH MY GOD YOU QUOTED MUMFY

[Careline]

AND DARKNESS IS A HARSH TERM, DON'T YOU THINK?! AND YET IT DOMINATES THE THINGS I SEE...

[Will]

IT SEEMS THAT ALL MY BRIDGES HAVE BEEN BURNT

[Careline]

Yes I burned them down. Find a way across.

[Will]

I can swim, don't you worry

[Careline]

Try swimming through a dam

[Will]

I go over it, silly.

[Careline]

Well... YOU GET MY POINT OK

[Will]

I don't. I just know that I'm right

[Careline]

Not this time.

[Will]

Always....

[Careline]

So you think...