Ok

"Are you ok?"
is a loaded question,
and answering truthfully
ain't my intention.

I'm never ok;
can't you read what I write?
I tell truth to the page
it's there in plain sight.

I'm just not ok
my head wants to explode.
Stress and more stress,
my body implodes.

Work is a killer;
I'm never at home.
But you just see my cover,
white walls and chrome.

I'm going mad within,
but that's not what you'd say:
"Oh, he's just fine!
I'm sure he's ok!"

Reviews

[s y e]

This is great, Will -- I loved the structure and imagery of this one.

I hate when I send out a huge message and my reply is 'okay', grrrr, makes me so mad!

[Will]

Lol. Exactly. Thanks, Sye.

[richom]

This is excellent, both for the construction and for the content. It's a good thing people don't answer truthfully when they're greeted with "How do you do?" or "How are you?" Their replies would be long and tedious in most cases. You have wonderful cadence in the first four stanzas, but it falters in the last one. I hope you're ok with this review. Richard

[Will]

Thank you, Richard. I do understand that the last stanza is a bit flustered compared to the rest, but I wanted those two lines of wuetation in there, and that's how it turned out. I'll give it a go later if I have the time. Thank you once again

[Will]

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[Stevo The POE-t]

I can relate to this poem a lot man... I tend to do this a lot when someone asks me if I am okay? I find it easier to fake a smile and say yes than to explain my feelings to someone. I am a writer, I write my feelings down on paper. I can't say them word of mouth. Really good job on this one... Thanks for sharing man...

[Will]

Thank you for reading, Steve. it's highly appreciated.

[Rita L. Sev]

Insightful, true, and well composed, Will. "OK" is a lame expression - it's tossed out to placate people around us. We all deal with stress (not ok) and joy (much more than ok) daily - but no one wants to hear that.

I tell truth to the page
it's there in plain sight.

Let it out here - and to those who know that ok says so little...

[Will]

Thank you, Rita.

[Cody Williams]

A great poem! Thanks for sharing!

-CW

[Will]

Thanks, Cody

[Careline]

I swear if you've been lying to me, I'll kill you.