Alone in your Presence

It's dark

The bedside cold

You're right beside me

Lately it never seems like it

We never kiss the way we used to

A cold peck here and there

When was the last time your fingertips grazed my skin?

Constantly in the same room

Yet, I still feel alone

Treated like a ghost you can't see

I wonder if you made me a memory?

Head hung low

Silently

I go back to my shadows

The tears that sting my eyes stain my cheeks

My heart fills with cracks

But doesn't break

Finding it hard to move on

I lay on the cold ground

Waiting

For the pain to fade

Reviews

[Augustus]

Very touching poem. How agonizing to be ignored like this! Such disappointment, and no freedom from it either. Incarcerated by a forlorn hope. For me the defining lines were
"My heart fill with cracks
But doesn't break"
So much is said about how heartbreaks can be tough. But this cracking is torture. There is no release from it! Cracks can be sealed. Rifts can be healed. But will they ever be? Or is the winter here to stay?
I rate this poem highly, as it underscores one of the lesser expressed perspectives on the pain of unreturned love in a very poignant manner. Extremely well done!

[FlatLineBeauty]

Thank you so much! It's so amazing that you read between the lines with the cracks. Xo Winter

[Augustus]

You're most welcome! :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

I can relate to this. I know how painful it is to be taken for granted because I was once in that situation.
This is moving yet written with elegance. I like the diction/choice of words.
Keep going.

[FlatLineBeauty]

Thank you daisie xo Winter

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

You're welcome.

[Raymond Federle]

Wonderful poem....full of longing and passion and pain. Excellent! :)

[FlatLineBeauty]

Thank you :) xo winter

[ron]

Iv'e been there before, it's one of the loneliest feelings. Big hugs.

[FlatLineBeauty]

-hugs-thanks Ron xo winter

[ron]

You are most welcome Amanda x