Creature...

Dusk settles

Like an uneasy silence

Shadows coalesce, abundance brings night

Darkness, the forest sleeps.

Slow winds claw upon needles

Branches resisting the chilled sway

Never seen, motion subtle

Eyes open, a nocturnal hunt

A scent carries

A quarry is found

Moving slow

Down low

Patience is the particular

Death’s time awaits tonight

A fresh kill to be

Blood shall quicken the flow

Never heard…

Never seen…

The reaper of the night…

Pounces!

 

Reviews

[xXxCynicalWarsxXx]

intense, my friend, but very vivid. I could see the creature move with stealth, and feel the muscles upon my hands, as if to feel it as it moved. I could see the creature, assuming a leapord maybe (?) move through the night. And it is a fair game of prey and predator. Very and nicely done!! Bravo!

[A.E. Reed]

Very nice. I like how you set the scene and slowly brought in some suspense. The flow was wonderful. Wonderful. :)

-A.E. Reed

[Pi Cee]

Very visual. Good words. Great write, though that's not unusual with you =)

[Hoosier Belle]

This is so cute yet so wonderful. I loved this.

[DeliriousCerises]

Very clear and descriptive. I could see the forest, the sun going down, a low wind picking up. And a predator, a majestic creature of sorts blending into the forest, its home, its forest. I loved it. I guess I don't have much for constructive criticism, just praise. "Reaper of the night" I like this line the most, it give the impression that this creature is powerful, untouchable, and for the prey, a form of unavoidable destiny.

[Dezzyray]

it's amazing!! it made me a bit scared reading this :3

[Aeternal Oceanfire]

Amazing! It brings back memories of a short poem I wrote in the fifth grade. Thank you for giving your opinion on my poem.

Mason

[Kat Collins]

Tickled my fancy! Reminded me of my cat, Nittany, who prowls and leaps and hunts...and at times goes a bit beserk. Although this has a much darker tone to it. Very mysterious! Excellent.