Leaving Home

The sunlight warm had cast a charm ,
on my mind today
I could hear aloud and clear ,
please don't go away .

 

I looked around but none I found ,
save the oldest garden tree ,
it seemed somehow every outstretched bough ,
was waving back at me.

 

It pained my heart but I had to start ,
I opened the gate to go ,
every step I took I turned to look ,
my pace so very slow .

 

As I waved goodbye I heard a sigh ,
as wind blew through the grass
A helpless voice ,"I have no choice ,
you may pass you may pass".

 

Reviews

[Deviant Works]

Utterly enchanting and beautiful... I am struck speechless by the emotions in this poem. My eyes filled with tears as I came to the very end, which I must say was closed absolutely superbly. In truth, I was just blown away by the last two lines, without a doubt they left a gut-wrenching impact. There is no place like home. Nowhere better to be but in the one place that holds many of your fondest of memories. I love this piece, Abhijit. Amazingly written.

[Valentine]

All i know is this so remined me of a tree in my parents front yard that seemed to be the anchor of all of us 9 children..beautiful..valentine

[Rose Masen]

Short and held it's own so profoundly. I loved it, a lot.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Great Poem! I'm still at home with my mom, and it would be scary and different if i every do leave the nest"LOL"

[ice]

Haunting, in a good spirit kind of way..But to me, home is where the heart is, and you never really have to leave.
I have felt these same messages from trees, and wind, and grass..
They speak to me, and apparently speak to you.
I enjoyed this poem, it is classic and timeless..and this is something that I cannot say about many that I read...even from famous poets

[HopelesslyDevoted]

gorgeous piece of art... very touching, it brought me to tears and made me really feel the emotions you were trying to get accross through this writing! wonderful joB!

[roarke]

Smooth writing, easy rhyme, excellent images. Everything is in it's proper place with this poem and it delivers a meaningful message. Good stuff.

[Fallacy Pharmacy]

Stunning!

[Allan Eddings]

Stunningly written, full of power without any of the usually associated verbosity and pomp. Conveys the feeling of leaving home and hearth with a much unexpected elegance, almost pastoral and elegiac.

Congratulations and please continue writing.

Sincerely,
A.E.

[xjust-for-me.x]

beautiful write.

[sweta'karman']

every goodbye and a waving hand,
invites their return back to the land.
when the wood and the road weeps for you
wrap the images and soak the hue.....................

very nice nostalgia created ...........