~ The Man on the Hill

~ The Man on the Hill, E+E, Forlorn times, Truth, Love, Lands, Nature, Green, Mist, Dreams, Poetry, Me, You, Pain, Hurt, Real, Telepathic

~ The Man on the Hill

 

 

In a dark hole, in all truth, he found me,

As a lonely soul, in truth, he did,

Souls dancing along stalactite caves,

Deeper under all

Steadfastness could be~

 

Love in a dream, of hope - and

His red beating heart, on the hill,

Contours that beautifully invisible,

Laughing in silky shades,

While touching her inner core...

 

He found me, he did.

Half gasping for some air,

And palpable deep feelings,

So she did, she did, for real;

 

And under the fog of the highlands,

His feelings entwined, buried,

For something deeper than lust,

For a lifetime, and trust,

He stood….

 

 

~ Elisa Laura

Author's Note

Enjoy :) -x-

Reviews

[TheSweet]

I don't quite get the 'he did' and 'she did' repetition for anything other than an affectation, but I do kind of like it. It grounds the poem to a down to earth level. And from there you can see the feelings being pretty intense, especially towards the end. As always, an enjoyable read.

It's about two lovers finding each other again.... :) through deep times, and within all that it costs... I'm glad you liked it. Yes, this was a real intense one, thank you so much again for all your lovely reviews, I'm grateful. :) xx

[Robert Strzalko]

I really like the opening line. In a dark hole, in all truth, he found me.....something deeper than lust. That's what's hard to find and to hold on to.

Thank you so much Robert, for your time, and kind words. :)

[NeiL ArandA]

Enjoyed this one Ms Elisa ... Your writings are still and always poignant as ever !!!

Thank you so much Neil, also for your kind comment on my page... I'm happy you feel home at Elysion, and have always a place to stay :) hope all is well my friend.

[joshua deathdealer]

i have chillbumps.. I can see this clearly.. The fog. The silhouette standing strong and unwavering. Thank you for sharing this. I have been found. Gasping for air.

Thank you with whole my heart, sweetest friend!!! ♥ for your lovely comment here.

[V. P. Trujillo]

Enjoyed.

















Screw twenty five characters...

Yeah brother Screw em!!!! you are right, thank you for just sensing, you're good in that.

read moreYeah brother Screw em!!!! you are right, thank you for just sensing, you're good in that.

:) I'm happy you were here..... !!!!!!!!! haha yer funny............... x) NERD ♥

WC hates us, it's too magnetic probably to handle people's awesomeness...

What I said:

Yeah brother Screw em!!!! you are right, thank you for just sensing, you're good in that. :) I'm happy you were here..... !!!!!!!!! haha yer funny............... x) NERD ♥