The Clock on the Wall

A shadow in the hall 

the moonlight on the carpet 

A moth on the ceiling 

the man in the door 

A girl sleeping soundly 

the cat by her feet

A cricket in the distance 

the light flicking off

A long night ahead says

the clock on the wall

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice logical flow of thoughts. Clocks do control us. Life is being in the right place at the right times. Thank you Alex for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Kelly Scheppers]

You show a good eye for detail, Alex...this flowed quite nicely!

[Bare trees]

I'm afraid this left me puzzled.

[Alexzandera]

It's just a short poem about a man checking on his daughter as she sleeps. I'm unsure where you're confused, but thank you for your review. I hope my reply clarifies for you.

[Bare trees]

I think the poem could use more detail. The man could be anyone. I assumed it was someone evil.
read moreI think the poem could use more detail. The man could be anyone. I assumed it was someone evil.
The light flickering? From outside? Inside?

Why will it be a long night ahead?
the moonlight (in) the carpet
A moth (in) the ceiling

Both prepositions should be 'on'.
the moonlight on the carpet.

Do you see what I mean?

[Alexzandera]

Poetry is always open to interpretation.

[Bare trees]

My last message was cut off but no matter. Good luck with your writing.

A moth on the ceiling