My fix

My fix

A Poem by Zoelouise

My stomach in my mouth as the clock ticks, Needing and wanting for my fix,
Loving and hating at the same time,
All that I want is to make you mine,
It is not that I need you or that I am alone
I am just lost and you're my way home.

© 2015 Zoelouise


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DrD
Clever and compelling word useage with a very sensitive, appealin conclusion. I like your style and choice of theme. I will be visiting you more often because this is another of your work that I enjoyed thoroughly. I would have preferred that line 2 was structured as "Needing and waiting for my fix" because that would justify the "for" word which seems out of place as "needing for."

Posted 11 Years Ago


Zoelouise

11 Years Ago

Thank you I agree the poem would have a much better flow with line 2 as 'needing and waiting for my .. read more

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Added on November 10, 2012
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Zoelouise
Zoelouise

Cardiff, United Kingdom



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