What Happens When We Die

This is what I want my afterlife to look like

All the lilies begin to sing

Petals dancing fantastically

Waters flowing majestically

To such a somber melody

As birds twitter tweet

That death is a wonderful treat

And warm rays of sun

Bathe you in golden river runs

Of starlight and wonder

While you're sleeping under

Soft rain is falling down

Everything cools under the sound

Of singing lilies

On starry nights

Away from all your foolish frights

Under the mist that follows rain

The world is now calm and tame

Here forever you will sleep

With the lilies of the deep

Sweetly they sing their lullaby

To the darkness in the sky

We all shall hear when we die

Author's Note

I'm not a religious person, but if there is an afterlife, I'd like mine to be like this. I am aware that there is no real rhyme scheme and I don't care!

Reviews

[Alex Vidmar]

I like this.

[Alexa Tasch]

Psh aw thanks!!! And long time no see!!

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

This piece struck me as being really beautiful and original, I hope you enter my contests again.

[Alexa Tasch]

Thanks so much!

[Jesse Jacques]

"Earth laughs in flowers" :D your poem reminded me of The Guys. so great job :)

[Alexa Tasch]

lol thats what I was aiming for

[Jesse Jacques]

woopwoop

[Alexa Tasch]

lol oh you

[Jesse Jacques]

what?

[Alexa Tasch]

you're little woopwoop

[Jesse Jacques]

oohhh thanks :D

[Amber Tasch]

I really like it and the use of imagery is wonderful. The only yhting that threw me off was the rhymem scheme because it didn't really follow through, but the words seemed to surpass that and the poem came out wonderfully any ways!

[Alexa Tasch]

lol thanks!

[L. Catherine]

This is absolutely beautiful Alexa!!!!! I really really REALLY love it!!!! I especially love the first several lines "All the lilies begin to sing Petals dancing fantastically
Waters flowing majestically To such a somber melody". Final grade: 100!!! :D

[Alexa Tasch]

Thanks!!

[L. Catherine]

Welcome!

[Damien Davison]

Sounds amazing, a tranquil afterlife indeed. I would want my afterlife to be something along these lines, an escape in to nature. It's almost like your energy returning to the earth sorta. Anyways, thanks for sharing!

[Alexa Tasch]

Thanks for the review!! I'm glad you liked it!

[K.G]

can this be a part of my after life too?

[Alexa Tasch]

only if you want it to be

[K.G]

yay ^.^%

[Dr. Wood ?]

You seem to do what I do whenever I try free verse..just slip in the odd rhyme to tie it together.....I hope your vision comes true for you....For all of us..Heaven is in the mind..Believe and it will be....Bloody hell I sound like an evangelist...I have no faith in any God, but the human mind is a wonderful and underused thing

[Alexa Tasch]

I dont believe in any god either, but this would be nice when I die

[The Violent Wolf]

lol who cares about rhyme scheme :P free verse is my fave kind to write haha btw i love it :)

[Alexa Tasch]

Thanks!