If I ever feel like fake poetry

One day your legs might not bring you to me
One day I might taste bad on your lips
Like a fake poetry you made to entertain your master
Like an egg with a purple yolk

But please as half of my soul
Is in there
In you

Please do not leave this animal in pain
Please do come and console me
A warm look in your eyes
A little whisper 'I care for you'
A hug
An embrace

Please do come and meet me as a friend
If I ever feel like an egg with a purple yolk
Oh please
Do not leave this animal in pain

Reviews

[Eden]

Wow. This poem is beautiful and hits the heart. I love the imagery of the egg with the purple yolk. Another line I specifically enjoyed was "One day your legs might not bring you to me", which is a creative and intriguing way to express them losing their desire to come see you. I also loved "one day I might taste bad on your lips." How inviting for the reader to engage their sense of taste. Lastly, I was hit like a ton of bricks in my heart when I read "please do not leave this animal in pain." Wow. Incredible delivery to the reader the themes of desperation, pity, like leaving you there alone is inhumane and cruel. This is supported by the line "please do come and meet me as a friend" as it accents the feeling of desperation and longing for any kind of connection. To not have your soul torn apart. Amazing poem. Was confused by the line "like a fake poetry you made to entertain your master." Were you perhaps trying to express feeling like a jester of a king, doing a demeaning dance or singing frivolous songs for a little favor? That is how I interpreted it at least. Maybe "like a fake poem" instead of "poetry" might read better. Overall seriously and deeply enjoyed this poem.

[a_methyste]

Hello Eden. So nice to talk to you in this cute day. Fake poetry means writing to attract attention, writing things you just do not mean just to satisfy the audience. I love this poem and I am glad you like it too. Hugs dear.