A Medic's Love Poem

Palpate my palpitations and

Resuscitate me with your eyes;

Defib me with your lips

Come and take me to paradise.

 

Feel my heart through your pulse,

And intertwine our arteries;

Dialyse my blood with love

And other palatable remedies.

 

Breathe me in through your lips

And exhale me in your heart.

Let us drink eternity tonight

Till it chooses to depart.

 

Reviews

[Rachelle]

:) Clever play of the jargon! This I am passing to 4 brothers - all in the medical/allied medical field - with your permission, of course!

[Tom]

You should put this clever poem up in the staff room of the hospital or surgery you work in Abdul, your colleagues will be further inspired in their honourable occupation !

A romantic and purposeful poem, penned with creative humanitarian flare !

[Epipsychologist]

Sounds like your a heart doctor, in more than one sense. I imagine healing and treating people all the time can be emotionally alienating. Perhaps not, but I imagine it's that way.

[icelandicblue]

A medically exquisite poem. It's very clever and quite lyrical. I am impressed by your creativity. I thought the jewel of the poem was this line:

Dialyse my blood with love

[Abdul Aziz]

Thank you very much :)

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

What I really like about this poem is how you have taken medical terminology, which is natural for you, and expressed your love for someone in terms that are not the norm. You are expressing your desires with a language all your own.

I love the imagery of "intertwining arteries" --- two hearts joined together in love --- you within the beat of hers, and she within the beat of yours.

Lovely!

[Abdul Aziz]

Thank you for the wonderful review Linda :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"let us drink eternity" at least as long as ours lasts..

the metaphor here is quite catching...

"intertwine our arteries"

yes...

nicely done.

jacob

[Abdul Aziz]

Thank you for your kind words Jacob