My Personal Diary/ My pages of Pain...

My Personal Diary/ My pages of Pain...

A Poem by abhas

I’m writing a million pages or more,

Still it seems I haven’t spilt it all out,

I’d prefer the blinding lights indoor,

For outside I’m too afraid to shout,

 

Different words come up and die again,

Breaking the ice was never that easy,

Many have walked above this weathered terrain,

Hard to trap them in pages when they’re so greasy,

 

The harder I try ... the sooner I fall,

And wrath gets the better of me,

I summon the beasts that eat my dreams overall,

Rightfully break the chains of silence... and my thoughts feel free,

 

I’ve laid down curses at His gate,

 Eating my body to free my soul,

I cry to him to stop- he who writes my fate,

Because I want to live in someone else’s role,

 

Every page resounds and wants to revolt,

Hypocrite as I am to seek glory by selling pain,

The one’s who talk soft are the ones ice-cold,

To blame predestination paradox for corpses being slain,

 

I’m writing a million pages and I write one more,

A vase of black roses falls to the floor,

Another world awaits my visions ... I cannot ignore,

I deny heavily that I feed this gore,

The right to write, to tear my scars, to make them sore,

These words don’t stop until I close my door,

Sway my thoughts to virgin lands of another page they explore....

© 2010 abhas


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I'm probably not the best reviewer on this site because of how picky I can be. So first, let me say that I like the poem but... I have two options: be diplomatic, or I could be honest. I like the poem for the story it suppresses in the background. I think that the limitations of a total rhyming scheme proves to be cumbersome for a poem like this that just wants to spill on the page. The english language has roughly over 200,000 words, so rhyming further limits what you can say at critical points in the poem. I'm not tellin you to stop the rhyming scheme. To put it better... I love the poem. But I think I could love it more!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I love where you are going with this...I think perhaps the rhyming gets in the way a little, in that some of the lines seemed forced to rhyme ...good visuals, great emotions....work it some more and it could be fabulous

Posted 9 Years Ago


Great poem, wrongly worded, but could use some work, awesome write :D

Posted 10 Years Ago


I'm probably not the best reviewer on this site because of how picky I can be. So first, let me say that I like the poem but... I have two options: be diplomatic, or I could be honest. I like the poem for the story it suppresses in the background. I think that the limitations of a total rhyming scheme proves to be cumbersome for a poem like this that just wants to spill on the page. The english language has roughly over 200,000 words, so rhyming further limits what you can say at critical points in the poem. I'm not tellin you to stop the rhyming scheme. To put it better... I love the poem. But I think I could love it more!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is a really good poem.

Posted 10 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I agree with the thoughts in this poem. I wish I could shout and scream out in the public for great change and many other things. I would be arrested or consider crazy. So I write on paper and I hope someone will read and understand. Total poem is very good. It isn't easy to stand and work for change in this world. I believe people blind them-self and hope someone else will fix the problems. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 10 Years Ago



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