Awake

Awake

A Poem by dicey jones
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never stay awake...

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Awake...
Wwide Eeyed opened
Looking at the Ceilings crumpled...
Alone, lonely yet far from it.
The image passed
Jumped down on you;
You scream...no response 
You're are the only person remaining in the world. 

© 2013 dicey jones


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dicey jones
Scary?..

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You do use some very interesting imagery and I really like that about this work.
"Jumped down on you;
You scream...no response "
I really found these two lines, unique and pulling. It is haunting by the end.
I will say you left me wanting more though, I really think this is a piece you might consider adding to if you are inclined, I know I would love to read more of it.
Sincerely
Chris

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

dicey jones

8 Years Ago

I think i might just do that if my imagination goes darker... thanks again for your reviews.
d.. read more
unsavable_soul

8 Years Ago

Not a problem, I enjoy giving them as long as I most often don't over step myself.
Chris



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not exactly scary... but frightening with fact that loneliness itself frightens.

nice write, liked it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


You do use some very interesting imagery and I really like that about this work.
"Jumped down on you;
You scream...no response "
I really found these two lines, unique and pulling. It is haunting by the end.
I will say you left me wanting more though, I really think this is a piece you might consider adding to if you are inclined, I know I would love to read more of it.
Sincerely
Chris

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

dicey jones

8 Years Ago

I think i might just do that if my imagination goes darker... thanks again for your reviews.
d.. read more
unsavable_soul

8 Years Ago

Not a problem, I enjoy giving them as long as I most often don't over step myself.
Chris
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Pax
intense! ~ you captured the feeling of being alone in the big bad world... the feeling of being helpless without anyone to hold into...
great job!

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Added on April 6, 2013
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dicey jones
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Aboki, Nigeria



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