The stars

A poem I wrote a while ago :)

Apparently,

The stars shine all night

You said they would watch over me,

Look after me while I sleep

If I’m honest, it makes me feel better,

Looking up,

You can see them dancing,

Dancing,

Dancing,

Dancing,

Dancing all night.

 

I trust them,

But I don’t trust trust.

I don’t trust many things.

 

You see,

At night I trust the stars,

But in the day

 

There’s nobody.

Author's Note

Thoughts and reviews please :)

Reviews

[Calypso]

Very good write.

[Tony]

Really like the strong comparisons you make here. I also like your use of repetition. Thought provoking poem. "At night I trust the stars/But in the day/There's nobody"-- Great work all around but especially was drawn to the ending.

[Linear]

So many things seem far out of reach, therefore they cant harm us, so we can place our hearts with them trust them not to tear us apart, but sooner or later there will come a time, when starlight will no longer shine for you, then you must place your trust in mortal men.
Enjoyed your poem, well done

[Jūdan FyreHeart]

I like the way a lot of people can relate to this. Relaxing under the stars at night with the feeling of safety. Completely escaping from the rat-race and hardships during the day. Nicely done.

[OT]

beautiful poem!! there's such mystery in the stars!!

[Gone]

WOW! I have soooo been there! Very moving

[ItsMyTimeToShine]

This is really, really, REALLY good :) I love the part, "At night I trust the stars, but in the day there's nobody." That really got to me for some reason. There's just so much emotion in this. Great job! :D

[Cassidy Mask]

ahhhhh this is beautiful :) I love the first two lines:

'Apparently,
The stars shine all night'

brilliant :D xx

p.s WELCOME TO WRITERSCAFE :D :D :D xxx

[Arsenic Nemesis]

Aww, this is so very sweet and I know what you mean. I must admit I very near DEPEND on the stars and then they are hidden in the morning, it's never good. A lovely piece once again here, I do enjoy your writing mortal, keep it up! ~

[LittleGuitar94]

Ahh, that's deep (not sarcastic btw).
I can totally imagine this as a song for some reason... you know, a little acoustic guitar in the background - it's all good!
So yeah, I reeeallly like this :))