Sunset Blue

-Under A veil made of Awe
Behind the distant facade of rising walls
Below divinity's hidden shawl, embedded invisible law
Dreams in brighter light, of monuments still standing tall
Creaking bridges old, and sweetest smells benign
Where trees are wide, and branches alive; shadows upon the living Earth

-These narrower paths I wind, graying leaves and stillborn roots
A place we all grow to hunt; the tranquility of man-made memory
Rapid breaths gasping inklings of pasts weathered serenity
Dreams in shallower lakes, of streams abandoned flow
Hovering veils, clouds peering down their scorched view
The color of striped skies above, expressive, sunset blue

Reviews

[LlamaLord]

Very strong vocab This piece has a very nice as well. The imagery kept popping into my head which is exactly what you want as a writer... Simply love these lines!

"Creaking bridges old, and sweetest smells benign
Where trees are wide, and branches alive; shadows upon the living Earth"

Quite a beauty :) keep me updated with your work (send me some requests) would love to read more of yours!

-Austin

[Alaska Frost]

Excellent poem. Expressive, beautiful, and full of imagery. It has descriptive language and is very well-done!
Great write.
"Under A veil made of Awe
Behind the distant facade of rising walls
Below divinity's hidden shawl, embedded invisible law"
^love it!!!!!! My favorite lines!!!!

-Alaska Frost :)

[Bhavya Kaushik]

I simply loved this piece of writing, the imagery is just so powerful and beautiful!

Great work

"The tranquility of man-made memory". This line spilled it for me; it made me think that I know what the poem might be about. How man's actions have ruined the earth, perhaps?
Love the rhythm- it got me chanting.