Tell me

Say what you mean

and mean what you say 

tell me the things that trouble you 

those things that make you laugh 

when you're away from me 

where will you be 

say the words

to set me free 

am I your only 

or is there another who pleases you 

tell me the places for me to touch 

whisper those things 

that no other should know 

confide in me 

show me the future you see 

tell me how you want me 

to be

Author's Note

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I really enjoyed reading this. Technical: the word in the first line of the second stanza should be "you're" as in "you are" instead of the possessive "your". Otherwise the piece seemed perfect. That opening line was something my own dad told me often and was his greatest parenting advice to me as well. The last verse reminded me of the song "Smooth" by Carlos Santana and Rob Thomas where the lyrics say. "I'd change my world to better suit your mood". Hopelessly romantic. A great read, F.

[Daz]

Thanks Fabian for pointing out that error. It's cool you mention Santana, I've been listening to the "Between Good and Evil" CD I just rediscovered in my collection. And I love that song , Smooth with Rob Thomas. Thanks for review. I'm glad you liked this one.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

My pleasure, very much enjoyed and I like when others find my mistakes for me. I make as many as anyone but try to proofread and edit them out before publishing. I still miss some in the process. And I love all of Carlos' music. My brother bought "Abraxas" right after it came out on vinyl and as a youth the naked lady on the cover piqued my interest. (laughing) Came for the naked lady, stayed for the music.

[Chris Shaw]

A wonderful poem Daz. The opening stanza is particularly powerful and one I can relate to. You convey your thoughts so openly while some people can be so deep, it is difficult to ever truly understand them . Great work.

Chris

[Daz]

Thanks Chris. I always appreciate your thoughts. Take care.

[Thomas W Case]

Tremendous work. Powerful.

[Daz]

Thank you Thomas.

[LisaCarol]

This poem was very intimate and sensual. The flow of the words was wonderful. I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing your writing.

[Daz]

Thanks for your review.

[Labella]

This poem flows so beautifully. “tell me the places for me to touch” is such a gorgeous line.

[Daz]

Thank you!

[Daz]

I'm thinking an alternative theme to this poem would be "Let Me"

[Donna]

I really like that, it has good flo.
Nicelly written Remi

[Daz]

Thank you dear Donna.

[Chris]

The words that bind with silken dreams and so soft whispers through the nights...

[Daz]

Thanks for this awesome review.

[Chris]

they are REAL words for real thoughts...