Insignificance

what I need to realize

is my insignificance

there is no one

planning this out for me

there is no point

in worrying about this

there is no motive

for what others do

each human creates

a self-centric universe

they constantly collide

consistent crossfire

there is no order

Reviews

[Cyndy Robinson]

Not sure I agree with the sentiment. But well written.

[stargirl23]

That's okay and I like the fact that it is debatable; thank you.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Very well said, Adi. When we know how insignificant we are, it makes us more humble.
You are right, there is no order, just constant crossfire.

[stargirl23]

Thank you!!

[Gaia Octavia]

Loved it! I don't even know how this makes any sense but somehow, as I read this, it reminded me of haiku (in a great way). Obviously not the format of it but in the way that it expresses a grand theme in a small amount of words. You seem to have the insight of someone far older than your years may suggest; never lose that! It is very special and it shows in the maturity of your work. My favorite part was "each human creates/ a self-centric universe/ they constantly collide/ consistent crossfire/ there is no order" #1 sooooo true and #2 I heart alliteration ☺ truly WELL DONE!

[stargirl23]

Aha thank you!

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

This one is really making me think. "There is no order"...I think of synchronicity and yet that could just be part of the self-centric universe you speak of. Many thoughts here and not quite sure how to sum them up.

[stargirl23]

I'm glad it made you think I always try to do that in my writing!

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

You succeed!

[Ruth]

When we realise despair is an illusion it is most freeing, wonderful piece Adi...has conviction...

[stargirl23]

Thank you:)

[Emily]

I really like the way you started it. It just jumped right in!
Very lovely poem!
Keep it up!!

[stargirl23]

Thank you:)