A Field of White Rocks

A Field of White Rocks

A Poem by stargirl23

I lay in between blades of grass

peering at a distant white rock

it stood so high and so pure

and it lay amongst a field of white rocks

and behold�"from what was so high it must have been Heaven�"

a filthy, fertile foot came down

and it covered and converted millions of white rocks

that's the order now: us, a foot, God

© 2016 stargirl23


My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Reviews

Very philosophical and deep in meaning. I find a spiritual touch in these lines as well.
Its good when a poem gets you to think as well. Well done

Posted 6 Years Ago


stargirl23

6 Years Ago

Thank you!
Powerful statement here. I love it. But think I would have liked a spiritual reference after the last line to show how much we aren't. Might be overkill, just me, lol.

Posted 6 Years Ago


stargirl23

6 Years Ago

I'll think about it!
[send message][befriend] Subscribe
dan
Adi, A very impressive philosophical musing. The symbolism contained in the white rocks is very strong and your equation at the end ties it up neatly in a softly spiritual way. Great job. take care...dan

Posted 6 Years Ago


stargirl23

6 Years Ago

Thank you very much:)
Great first line!
I like how you used 'blades of grass'.
Keep it up!

Posted 6 Years Ago


stargirl23

6 Years Ago

Thank you:)
Oh, brilliant, I like this Adi, makes one wonder on what role we have to play out in this realm and also why...really cool :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


stargirl23

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much!!

Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

258 Views
5 Reviews
Rating
Added on May 30, 2016
Last Updated on May 30, 2016

Author

stargirl23
stargirl23

About
15 years old, amateur everything more..

Writing
Dreams Dreams

A Poem by stargirl23