I AWAYS WANT YOU TO BE MINE

you are the sun of my day 
and the moon of my night
i never want you to walk away 
want you through out my life 

you color up my world with your love 
you always make me smile when i am sad
you are my angel send for me from above 
sometimes i hurt you but u love me more instead 

i don't care if my life gets messed 
cause i know what God has blessed 
blessed me with a friend like you 
who always there to solve my problems through 

you make my world bright 
by making the whole world shine 
you are the person i want to be with day and night
i always want you to be mine 

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good poem. Good to know what is real friendship is. I like the description and the positive feel of the poem. I like the strong ending to the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Pax]

sweet and possessive. i think these is one of your work that isn't sad.

[外人 (Gaiji..]

Great flow and metrica, a nice scheme, you didn't stick to a rhyme scheme, you've used two, at the beginning it was ABAB at the end AABB, that was original, curious and worked well ! Very good message, full of pathos and very sweet :)
Great job :)

[Btwixer]

such a sweet wonderful read.

[BLACK PRINCE]

This is a beautiful poem.
The emotions are deep and filled with truth.

Let me point out a little mistake in the second stanza:
' You are my angel SENT from above'. This is past tense.
But you used present tense SEND,
and that does not correspond with the line.
SENT is the right word to use.

Another advice:
Try to write proper words like YOU instead of U.

A poet is supposed to be a wordsmith
so you have to take your vocabulary a little more seriously.

WELL DONE!!!

[Kimberly "Melody" Carne..]

I enjoyed this

[Lindsay T]

Beautiful. This sounds like a true, lovely relationship. Must be a special someone :)

[Rusty]

Very nice I like it.

[Jordan A. Wilson]

very nice sentiments. the flow goes in and out though