Blackbird Day

A possible onset to a collaborative effort

 

Blackbird day

 

The softly singing of

The blackbird tune

Coming from behind

The dune’s wind

Making me aware

A new day has broken

 

My sleep turns into

Slumbering slowly

Reminding me

A new day has begun

Things to do

A list in my head

 

Is being spun

Into a thread of continuity

Always this list of

Things to do while

Still tossing and turning

Already working in my bed

 

Time to leave the safe haven

Heading for new challenges

Making this day unforeseen

For things are bound to happen

Tickling my brain

Preparing for a new start

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Since a few days I have been thinking about this project. Actually I did get the idea while waking up one day.
I gather most of you here will be familiar with James Joyce's 'Ulysses'.
Now my idea is to create a poem written in a stream of consciousnes and consisting of 24 seperate poems, each representing 1 hour of an average day. Once the first poem is written, the second writer can join in and write about the next hour and so on. The aim is to show how our lives can be intertwined even we do not know each other and using the 24 hour concept, the aim is to achieve a kind of circular movement in such a way that the last (24th) poem ends at dawn again!
I think it would be interesting to write this poem together with whoever who wants to take part and share 1 or more hours of a day in your life.
So...
I am looking for maximum 24 writers and minimum 4 or 5 collaborators...

Reviews

[luthien7]

As an hour in a day I think this is very good an a good way to start off the idea of your collaborative effort. A question: do you want differing points of view at each new "hour"? Or multiple continuations of what you've begun? If I remember correctly Ulysses dealt primary with the lives and events (which intertwined) of 2 main characters - are you looking to make broader connections?

[DeAn]

this was nice and I too see the gentle awakening in it. hmmm I would help but I have so many irons in the fire at this moment it is hard to even get a poem out of my own. :( sorry.

lovely poem tho.

great job and good luck. hope to come see it all in it's finale.

l8r g8r
-DeAn

[bluessadmood]

this is a wonderful thought my dear,to tell you the truth at first i did not get what you want ,its a great project ,i have read some of Ulysis since its banned here ,but i read a lot about it,only i am not so good at poetry ,so even though it think its a great project ,and to put so many live each telling his one hour life ,,really great,M

[R J Askew]

I like the description of the gentle awaking and can hear the blackbird singing away melodiously, the sound of summer. I tried to read Ulysses but simply cld not read it at all. Maybe will have to revisit it when I have a month to spare. I am hopeless at collabs as I can't slot myself into other thought streams. if i was tackling this I would have to do all 24 hours...actually I might be able to write a 25th hour for you, but that would be an hour outside the norm.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Intriquing notion. Sounds like a wonderful project. I, too, know what it feels like to be awakened by that sometimes annoying sound of birds and then begin to think in full force about the tasks that lay ahead. Very well captured here. Thank you for sharing this.
Light,
Siddartha

[alternative_be]

Thank you all for reviewing...
To AK: I did find your review constructive, but my clumsiness got the better of me :(
To Poetic Fluffer: I appreciate your honesty and will contact you!

I liked the concept. It is wonderful, but my time now is prohibitive.

For the poem, I like the fundamentals, which are well set.

The message and tone are wonderful.

A wonderful piece.

[AK]

I like it! I do the same thing... start going down the mental checklist of things I need to accomplish during the day, even while I still waking up. I guess the mind never truly sleeps.
Very nice!

[Butch Decatoria]

I do not understand the title, how it corresponds to the poem--other than weather or the reference of death possibly?? The ending felt a bit detached, maybe making that last line separate? to give it more of single statement? Thanks for sharing this, and wanting me to read it... and thanks for your review of mine.

~Pfluffer~

[Tessa]

I really really like this. the first half more than the second half, but i think it's just because the first half seems more abstract. the only thing i would suggest is that "tossing and turning" is a little overused... but it does work well for you. it's lovely.