Unaltered state of mind.

Unaltered state of mind.

Of all the colours

I saw today...

bright, alluring,

happy, convincing.

Somehow they all missed 

my target....

I felt alone, sad,

miserable, lost in

emptiness, staring.

Unconvinced, I sat

in the dark waiting

in nothingness as

colours passed by. 

Reviews

[Bacchus]

The winter of your mind. I so get this. The stealing away of spring happening in your head. I often describe the grayness of depression- but colors passing by and them existing that aren't affecting us is so much more accurate. For our minds rip reality from touching us.

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you Bacchus for a great review.

[Bacchus]

I'd love to hear what you think of my Back for Rainbow Jell-O poem... doesn't touch yours hear- but love to hear your feedback.

[andrew mitchell]

i shall check it out

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think the speaker needs to talk to William Hurt and find about how he went into his "Altered states"

colors dull with feeling down..everything becomes shadows...and black and white...or mostly gray...actually..

no tone, no hue, no longer you.

j.

[andrew mitchell]

yes he would know lol. thanks for your words j.

[V]

Depression as it's finest, I'd say. Unfortunately I know this feeling (maybe too well). I really like how you added colors to the topic and the attributes, adjectives you assigned them. Nice read.

[andrew mitchell]

thank you vanessa, i had a low day yesterday for no apparent reason lol

[V]

I know that feeling. Writers might be more sensitive in a way.