A rainbow smile at wit’s end.

A fireworks display
a meteor shower of dreams
cover mind’s constellation inside
as the write exposed
eclipsed all thoughts
the black hole began
on all those
who read and viewed,
starting to forget
on reflection
about the write
that never lasted:
a universal break
of projected thoughts.

Reviews

[Relic]

I have a bunch of writes I haven't posted yet because they're too dull. There seems to be some feeling that's missing in the poems that go flat. At least, to me, anyway. However, how often can you have fireworks in what you write? I guess some writers just know and recognize it. I have trouble in that department. I just get lucky sometimes.

[andrew mitchell]

Hi Tim I just cant remember peoples writes after I've read them as well as mine they just disappear into a black hole after making contact.

[Chris Shaw]

When you start a poem you immerse yourself into its creativity. Sometimes if you are lucky you can get that explosion of ideas. Yes, a bit like a firework. This I felt was more about unfinished poems when the firework became a damp squib. Not much of a display there for the reader. I may be way off Andrew, but that is where I went with these lines. All good wishes.

Chris

[andrew mitchell]

Hi Chris, I like your take. Mine was an obscure write really about on reading poet's writes I cannot remember them or the title, I even forget all mine that I write. They just all seem to fade like its all about that moment then its gone.