A Poem by doubletrouble508

you know the live above the influences commrcial,

why dont we listen to the advice,

they all arent bogess you know,

they are giving you advice that you should really take,

inless want to die do you,

because i know that if i was a mom i would want to bealive to see them graduation,

be alive to celebrate their 21st birthday,

see them get married,

once you die you have no one to blame but your self for smoking,

i am sure your family kids husband and relitives loves you they all dont want to see you die,

who do you have to blame when you die,

what do you have to blame when you die,

dont you wanna live at all brethe or see life,

then you die and think  was somking worth it


© 2009 doubletrouble508

Author's Note

sorry if i didn't spell it right the title is suppose to be the thing you smoke

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It's a very good topic, and a lot of emotion. The spelling however is very difficult to look past; consider even using spellcheck as an aid. It'll also help with the grammatical errors as well. Keep at it though, spelling can easily be fixed your work is good and you're doing awesome!

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Added on April 11, 2009
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