These Computers!

Beside the mucky table typing,

On the sweaty keyboard riding,

With aching fingers shivering about,

And bloodshed eyes popping out

They work on these computers!

They work as students, clerks and tutors

Then slowly the screen starts flickering,

But they! They keep on clicking,

They click images, they click the text

They click folders and whatever next!

Now they are lost, into the band

Of those little letters at hand

No heed they pay to others,

Be it younger or elders

No wonder why don’t they hear us?

They work on these computers!

----------- Amar laksh

Reviews

[Pragya Saxena]

Story of our everyday lives...
from someone else's perspective...!!
Nyc!

[Acron 4]

Good poem Amar, the last quatrain needs work, one suggestion might be, change the next to last line to read "It's know wonder they don't hear us", Lots of different ways to make it work better. anyway is a wonderful idea, this poem and put together very well............thanks for sharing.

[amarlaksh]

again thank you sir. I will ponder upon that

[Writer *78*]

Technology is a ever changing situation. Advancing everyday. Nice work.

[amarlaksh]

Thnanks. :)

[de_maruf]

fine

[Tex]

very good write. I never would have thought to do a write on this subject... you turned it into a deeper subject in your last stanza... very well done.

[Leslie Philibert]

Good work, funny, with good ideas.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi Amar a nice little piece that could fill me with amusement or foreboding, depending which way I perceive it!

[amarlaksh]

thanks for the review. And i think we should look at the former side

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ok will do.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

now this is different and very true......we humans get totally absorbed while doing this. Well done.

[amarlaksh]

thanks

[Baby Ricochet]

Great poem! My advice, stay away from free porn sites. They're a sure fire way to get infected with a nasty virus

[Ohhhwillow]

Different, an interesting subject, gets to the point