Life About To End

I don't remember when or why i wrote this but it had to be one of the times i was depressed.

Life About To End

 

Sitting in my bedroom, lying on my bed

I lay awake thinking, is my life about to end

I slowly begin raising the gun up to my head

My heart no longer will have to mend

 

I take one last deep breath of air

Squeeze down on the trigger

All of this just doesn't seem fair

Pain no longer able to grow bigger

 

Blood begins to spill

As my life starts to fade

All pain is gone, and now i no longer have to feel

Look at the big mess i've made

 

I wonder how many people will even care

This was all a mistake

The bullet begins to tear

My skin, and my body begins to shake

 

Someone call 911; help me before its too late

The light suddenly begins to fade away

My heart has lost its pulse rate

I didn't want this to happen; now i want to stay

 

The ambulance arrives and rushes in the house

They were too late, for now i am gone

The cops have to go and tell my spouse

My body in chalk is drawn

 

They put me in that black body bag

Carry me away

The sight of the scene makes everyone want to gag

What a horrible way to end such a beautiful day

 

Few days go past

Everyone still in shock

That no one knew that'd be the last

Time they'd see me, 'cause the time had run out on my clock

 

What they didn't know

Was my life was about to end

If they only knew how i felt so low

They would ahve been a better friend.

Author's Note

Yeah it's not my best but there you go

Reviews

[Jane Doe]

It's a great piece, it very effectively describes the mindset of someone suffering from depression. I am Bipolar and can really relate to this poem. It is a sad poem, and I like that you ended it the way you did, and didn't give it a happy ending all wrapped up in a pretty bow, cuz life doesn't always have a happy ending. Great job!

[Sarah]

Wow, such a powerful poem with a powerful subject. And very, very sad. I must say it's well written though with the rhyme scheme you have going on, great work.

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It is very good! I think this is really powerful! It goes deep into the mind of someone suffering! Good work!