A mask of Friendship !

A mask of Friendship !

A Poem by Ambereen
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Just a short piece on the betrayal of friend !

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You were a true Pal I thought
Until You Unveiled the mask
And behind it  was "Brutus" 
I am distraught :(

© 2013 Ambereen


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In the view point of Caesar one word Nice I enjoyed this even though it is short. Well Done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Ambereen,

I'm learning that a poem doesn't have to be long; just right. Your poem is just right. Could you say more? Probably. Do you need to? Probably not.

Brutus sort of says it all even without saying a word. I like that you used the word "distraught" because it speeks volumes here.

Eloquent; well done. Thank you for sharing it with us.

Posted 11 Years Ago


julius ceaser :) a story of betrayal - well done!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like it, but I do think you can go further with it.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Well, I'm sorry you feel betrayed.
I must say, you could be more original here...
Even with the same mental ingredients this could be spun to be less obvious and more emotion drawn in.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Ambereen

11 Years Ago

Thanks for the honest review I appreciate it and shall surely work on it .
Fantastic Ambereen! And great rhyming too!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Oh, don't you just hate when that happens? Few words that say so much, it's a betrayal that makes us leery of entering into friendships after the fact, nice one.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Ambereen

11 Years Ago

So true Frieda ... And then I find myself judging all my friends based on past experiences .... With.. read more
Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Human nature, after you've been betrayed.
I like this poem. Short, direct and to the point. Sometime we can see the real face before it is too late. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


Ambereen

11 Years Ago

Those times are a blessing Coyote indeed
Nicely written! This is a part of this life,only when something like this happens to us we make sure we doesn't do the same thing to others.In a way its a good thing.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

:/
Pretty brutal.

Posted 11 Years Ago


falling_toxic_rain

11 Years Ago

Trust me life is ful of that, but also those that will help you heal your wobds. Keep your head up,
Ambereen

11 Years Ago

Thank you for the encouraging words !
falling_toxic_rain

11 Years Ago

Youre welcome. p.s. sorry about the typos

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Added on January 9, 2013
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Ambereen
Ambereen

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