�Hope is not a Strategy�

The title is a quote that I remember reading somewhere. I�ve added some more lines to it�

 

Yes, the sun rises everyday

But only to cast shadows

Shadows that are so mesmerizing

That we run after our tomorrows

 

And at the end of the day

All sweaty and fatigued

When paradise seems within reach

Reality shows up. Hackneyed.

 

The sun sets. Still smiling. Unruffled.

Shadows convert into darkness

The dreamer awakens. Bleeding. Wounded.

The sun rises again with a fresh redness.

 

25^th June 2007

 

Reviews

[James Mayfield]

I personally love the use of hackneyed. It's a term not used very much anymore and I appluad your use of it. On the other hand, and this is the only flaw that I saw, using that particular word halted the flow right in the middle of the piece. It just didn't work with the way everything else was read.

[Sean M. Addams]

very deep and moving ... very good job on this.

[Shane Patrick]

Shadows that are so mesmerizing
That we run after our tomorrows

perfect!

[John Stussy]

Don't need hope to push on, just need determination. Hope is an empty thought, it tends to make people idle and wishful. Replace hope with raw determination and you are far better off. Good write, made me think. I might come back to this later.

[Jessica]

I agree, very deep.. I loved reading it. Well done.

[V. K. Harris]

Very deep, Excellent.

[Ladysue]

I love this,
And at the end of the day
All sweaty and fatigued
When paradise seems within reach
Reality shows up. Hackneyed.

I know this feeling all too well. Great write.

[A.L. James]

This was very thought provoking.

[Pema Dorje]

ohh yea, u got it, and the dust and ashes too ... yet, even in the light of Cosmic time, both great and small are extinguised into that eternity as meaningless perhaps, yet it remains important to live creatively with the courage of a Loving Heart ...

compelling write ...