Breathe.

I don't know, I kind of just made it up on the spot when I was crying.

Solemnity,

I pray for thee,

the picture of

contentment.

 

I have you now,

I can't allow

return of old

resentment,

 

And hurt, and pain;

what will I gain

from hanging myself

here

 

With loneliness?

Allow this mess

to divulge me?

I fear

 

To be alone

when my words drone

out into empty

spaces,

 

And when all of

the ones I love

no longer wear

their faces.

 

But masks of black,

and colors lacked,

ones I can't

recognize.

 

Be they blurred,

or be they stirred;

useless to

empathize.

 

Normal things,

and heaven's wings

do not belong

to me;

 

Can't pick up

speed enough

to fly away;

a being, free.

 

A shoulder

I can't smolder

with my sobs and salty

tears;

 

An ear

that cannot hear,

not there to know

all of my fears.

 

No smiling face,

or happy place,

to come home 

to, each night.

 

No quiet home,

sometimes alone,

can't hear them

scream and fight.

 

So I found,

to scratching sounds,

I'm solemn with

my pen

 

And pad in hand.

I will expand

my lungs; breathe,

count to ten.

 

One

 

 

 

 

...

 

 

 

 

Two

 

 

 

...

 

 

 

Three

 

 

...

 

 

 

 

Four

 

 

...

 

 

 

 

Five

 

 

...

 

 

 

 

Six

 

 

...

 

 

 

 

Seven

 

 

...

 

 

 

 

Eight

 

 

...

 

 

 

 

Nine

 

 

...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Ten.

Author's Note

Do -you- get it?

Reviews

[Silvario]

first of all... wow! this is SO well written. you are very talented with your use of words, very creative. this is such a beautiful piece. and beautiful in many ways, not only how well penned it is, but the feel of, and its meaning as well.

about its meaning, ill admit im not very good with interperating poetry. but i think i got this one and from my humble perspective, its beautiful indeed. the mood, the message the idea that is built up at the beginning and then reveal of a "place" of solace near the end, not to mention the count down. love it!

all in all, a wonderful write :)

one of my favs

[Michael X]

wow, great concept and the flow really captures the readers attention,
I have to agree with the comments below, great job.

[An owl on the moon]

This is so stunning.. the form.. the flow.. all of it within the sense of your breathing... trying to escape from the pain around you... people distant now... So well done. It provokes the most amazing feeling.

[Mr. Revan]

solemnity.. this in essence could be described in millions of lines of writing. but you manage to do it in such great format, in not nearly as many as a million lines(haha) but you do space things out and it gives me a sense of pause in it.. like each grouping is an individual thought, perhaps said on a different day... and it made me stop and feel the meaning of every single stanza. and then when you go onto the next one, you again feel.. just perplexed, but at the same time I get a sense of understanding, for i feel the same way. one more thing, i love the biblical styled writing, but my favorite part of this piece refers to the faceless...
Be they blurred,

or be they stirred;

useless to

empathize.

-amazing-

[Weaza]

Oh, my damn. This is such a deep poem! Its sad. But its beautiful. Extremely deep passonate emotions are written. I love this poem. Continue Writing!!!

~Weaza~

[Tori]

This is such a pretty poem. It really resonated with me, I feel like I can relate. You definitely have a gift with words! :)