Crawl

A cloud of razorblades.

emptiness swallowed the sun
and this needle thus resigned
to break the skin for things I’ve done
and for what I’ve left behind
inspiring sweet memories
to ensure, as they arrive
that they crawl back down inside of me
and eat themselves alive.

Reviews

[roarke]

and you can rhyme with rhythm too...... I hate that...... lol.

ever surprising.

nice stuff.

[Nobody.]

brilliant. the last two lines are just amazingly well written. so dark. addiction is a real b*****d! Well done!

[DoubtReality]

This is beautiful. Very powerfully written. I love the imagery interwoven through the entire piece.

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

This is excellent my friend.

[Emily B]

there IS power in the word

[ju]

some strong imagry, deep feeling. the rhyme is subtle- and worked well to draw me through the lines.

[Saraplenty]

I hate it when things don't stay where I want them to stay.

This conjures up images of the not-so-lovely, but the all-so-true.

[jenniewren (J.W. Bouwma..]

mmm this is.. delicious. it aches..sore toothache aching.. it feels like i'm biting off a mouthful of flesh..

happily, i make sense to me *grin*