Mayfly Ballad

A new hope has arisen in the galaxy for the Rebellion. The ultra-draconian Emporer shall not stand for much longer against the Jedi and their light side of the force!

Mayfly Ballad

 

Her aura glistens like a star

Her cheeks have dimpled lure

Such supple, shapely curves there are

The soul is choice and pure

 

With every tooth so perfectly

Aligned and shining bright

Each kiss a shard of Heaven be

Each word a dance of light

 

My heartache, woes, and strife have passed

Now love and friendship reign

The worst day that we shared surpassed

The unrelenting pain

 

Reviews

[J. Hampton]

ooooo...she is so Pretty.

This is beautiful in tone...content ...I respect a ballad ( i cant make them work)
and the font is perfect...
I must admit the description threw me oh so way off ?

I am touched by this line...

"The worst day that we shared surpassed
The unrelenting pain"

Gabe she will basically ...swoon ( do we still do that ? )

Blessssssssss

[Melanie Jane Boicourt S..]

To read the poem makes sence and I liked it's choice of words and rhyme scheme. I was confused about the comments or description that went with it. WHAT? Did I miss something?
Love All, Mejasha

[Papillion]

Very nice written poem

[ELii]

Very lovely poem. There is always a balance.

[SweetPeachesAlways]

"The soul is choice and pure"
I like this line.
Good flow...

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Oh wow, this is absolutely beautiful. I love it. Awesome write!!!

Heather

[Tania Leigh]

She sounds absolutely beautiful....what a wonderful ode to your love :-)

[poddar kushal]

at a loss and searching the right words to describe my feeling. the poem has came at the right moment, amid the dark shadow of the ghost of lost poems crawling in the cyber-space! the poem is deeply atmospheric. i like the "Each kiss a shard of Heaven be

Each word a dance of light"

[Robert Luna]

I love the rhyming scheme of this piece and the way you structured it to flow so evenly. You words speak of tenderness and passion as if they have until this point alluded you. You had not known a true happiness until now. I like the thought of finding that one perfect person for yourself and you being able to be that perfect person for someone else. That in itself is a beautiful thing to witness as you look to see all the wonderful things that she has to offer you and I must ask what will you do for her. I am reminded of lyrics from Meatloaf "On a hot summer night would you offer your throat to the wolf with the red roses" I really enjoyed this piece and think you wrote it beautifully.

Great Job!!!!!!

[Jenny Davis]

Beautiful! I sense this as being a tribute to your love...what a lovely piece of poetry :)

[JC Fox]

I enjoyed the font and it was such a smiley piece too, but even I can find the darkness behind such light words. Is it really about a new woman? Or is it about a new vice? These are the questions but all in all you know the real answers and meaning behind the words. Good job