In Memorium

As they say, "Parting is such sweet sorrow."

In Memorium

 

Parting is never easily done

The solo fishing expeditions

Empty hugs, and

“Returned to sender”

Christmas cards

 

How can you say,

“I love you,”

When all that remains

Is despotic void?

 

Reviews

[Emily B]

I like it. You knew I would. Billions of words have been written about loss and grief and Death. We could add thousands more of our own, if we tried. I find no need to add more to what you have written here. The simplest words sometimes tell the grandest stories.

I might leave the last section as is. . . adding articles just because you think there might be some vague grammar rule somewhere is never a good idea.

[Angel Bird]

Your words are reverberating within me! Since your lines have such ease, they reverse it into an infinite depth.
Who hasn't gone through such 'end-of-the-world-feelings?!? Who?
Only a few words with an immense impact. A great piece!

[JC Fox]

ah now see this is my kind of poem!

[Marie]

I liked it. Short, simple and to the point.

[Misa]

Hum. This felt really...incomplete, actually. The first stanza, you deal with rejection on an emotional level, in the second you leave us hanging with 4 somewhat vague lines. I got the reference on the second read - that his/her words are empty, even as they claim to love - but it felt like the despotic void could be expanded on.
Aside from that, however, l love the flow of the first stanza - the images are real, simple and easy to picture, and the returned to sender xmas cards particularly intriguing.
Oh, l think it should be "Is a despotic void." I'm not positive, however.