Looking for Perfection

Looking for the perfection of life

i came crawling  and howling

shouting the cries of my mind

but no one sees, no one hears

i climbed the highest stairs

walked the everlasting pathways

swam accross the deepest oceans

but i saw nothing, i found nothing

 i entered every open door

peeked at every spot i find

studied every virtues of life

but there were nothing

Life is so mysterious, so fabulous

annoying, i must say

surviving is a problem, no wonder

living alive is more than a killing punishment.

Reviews

[Damien Thibodeaux]

Arvin, I can relate to what you've written here. I have been there many times and it is a desperately frustrating place to be. I believe you have expressed your feelings very well. You have written something I can understand.

[arvin]

Than u Damien. i am a fan of your writings, and it is such an honor to receive such a review from u. thanks :)

[Shane Mohamed]

There is some sentiment and great expression here. Try to use some intricate vocabulary; it will help you express yourself better. I also would like to see some rhyme scheme. Great stuff. Keep writing.